ALO

This was edited by Duffy Dreamer'.

I am alone, too 
weird to be known

You all see my words, 
you never reply 
I am not that bad, am I?

Memory's of old lost
in my sea of untold

Separated from the 
pack, never to look back

I stagger, I cry, I track
Too lifeless to be
lost and broken back

I sit in the room, last to
be chosen, last to be looked

You know but never say 
for what I am today 

Now were here you 
all need help
upon I could seek
but I am blind as
you are weak

 

Reviews

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Being the stranger in the crowd can be an unenviable position to be subjected too¬! However, out of our darkest moments there can be a light of happiness - time will tell! Sad write, but an honest and brave poetical reflection of raw emotions - thanks for sharing - :-)

[A.L.]

May I edit this for you? It is a good write but may cause people to not focus on the powerful meaning if caught up in the grammar errors.

Just let me know :)

[Finn]

Of course.

[A.L.]

I am alone, too
weird to be known

You all see my words,
you never reply
I am not that bad, am I?

Memory's of old lost
in my sea of untold

Separated from the
pack, never to look back

I stagger, I cry, I track
Too lifeless to be
lost and broken back

I sit in the room, last to
be chosen, last to be looked

You know but never say
for what I am today

Now were here you
all need help
upon I could seek
but I am blind as
you are weak

[Ken Simm.]

Sad and strangely gentle self portrait. Very moving.