Too many poems

just to many poems

Poems all for they are 

and for all  they bring.

Why not sing a tale 

of a mysterious king.

perhaps the stores are to old

maybe to boring and

covered in gold . 

Too many to see 

to many to read 

only a few will 

pick at are needs

I could tell you my 

self about the

seas of lines.

Covered in numbers letters 

and lines.why not bring 

a book full of joy and despair.

 

Because no one will read

 whats in are mind or hair.

Author's Note

just to many poems

Reviews

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Hey - I just did - looks like you're fated to write even more poems and rhymes. There can never be enough .... PS had to laugh at barleygirl's fart reference - hope the 'smell' doesn't accompany the write! :-)

[barleygirl]

I like your tongue-in-cheek commentary about all the poems. I feel my poems are like farts . . . it feels so good right after I get it out, but then it's quite forgettable after that, I'm sure. So I completely understand your sardonic way of seeing poems. There are a number of errors to the point of distraction, but your writing is mostly strong & interesting.

[Finn]

Thank you. But i have to say when you said this :There are a number of errors to the point of distraction: This poem was made last year and since then my writing has improved greatly. Also thank for commenting it is rare that i get reviews.

[barleygirl]

The main thing is the use of the words "to" and "too" -- these are often mixed up here, but I understand what you're saying about improving. Don't worry about such comments. I only take note of it to be a thorough reviewer, noting the ups and downs. It's all about steadily improving as we write different things.

[Celie Rose]

I enjoyed reading. I like the phrase, "Why not sing a song of a mysterious king," comparing poems to mysterious kings. Critique: Please be careful about minor misspellings of words, adding commas, periods and colons. ex, "Perhaps these stories are to old, maybe to boring and covered in gold." (Perhaps these stories are too old, maybe too boring and covered in gold.). "pick at are need," (pick at our needs). "tell you my self," (tell you myself)...and lines.why not bring.." (..and lines. Why not bring...) Reading your poem out loud a few times will help to catch and correct minor mistakes. Overall your poem is nicely expressed and written. Keep writing!