Strange feeling

Strange feeling

A Poem by Dokuro-chan (Toeto-chan)

I was fast alseep

And right in the middle of a good dream

I wake up

Because, soemthing strange

Keeps nocking on my brain

I got up out of bed and yelled out randomly:

"I can't hide it anymore!"

I was in the middle of drawing a picture

When I suddenly realized

I had drawn

A picture

Of my friend

And suddenly I felt

A sudden strange feeling

I was eating and playing with my food

When I looked down

My mashpotatoes were shaped like you

I was writing a poem

And before I knew it

I have wrote this one

What a strange feeling

What ever made me feel this way?

Maybe it was when

You'd hug me tightly when I cried?

Or maybe when I shed a tear and you cheer me up

Maybe this feeling appeared when

I was alone all alone criying in the dark

That's when you came along

And you wiped my tears away

Maybe it happened

When I met you

You looked straight into my eyes

And you always were there

When I was sad or alone

This feeling that I cannot hide

I just want to make it stop

It's to soon

I mean after all the things you done

I'm greatful, oh yea I am

But, I already supposedly have someone

You treat way better than any other boy I've met

And you listen to me

You agree

And you aren't afraid to say what's on your mind

You treat me better than most people do

 

© 2010 Dokuro-chan (Toeto-chan)


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This is great. I can relate here too.....actually, this is how it started before I fell in love with my best guy friend....I know it feels like it's too soon, but eventually you're going to have to let go of the past and embrace the present.
Oh, you misspelled crying. Just thought I'd let you know.
Also........I'M THE FIRST TO REVIEW THIS!!! XD

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Great relateable piece. Nice work.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aaawwww :D Are you speaking of a long lost love, Toeto-chan? If you are, feel free to talk to me about it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it, in those moment when you don't if it is real and you want to know if it is. Those moments are full of confusion and sometimes people freak out when they know it is real (I know I have!) but is beautiful.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's to soon- to is supposed to be too., but that was just a typo. I reallly liked this poem! I thought it was very cute! :)



Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

My mashpotatoes were shaped like you. i love that line! i never felt this way before, although, i think it is a wonderful poem to express this feeling.. good write. it reminded me of Hinata and i thought that the picture was a good choice. good job!:)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is great. I can relate here too.....actually, this is how it started before I fell in love with my best guy friend....I know it feels like it's too soon, but eventually you're going to have to let go of the past and embrace the present.
Oh, you misspelled crying. Just thought I'd let you know.
Also........I'M THE FIRST TO REVIEW THIS!!! XD

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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