Storm

Lightning streaks across the sky,

And whips the waves to war,

Urging on the battle lines,

That dash upon the shore,

The air is filled with wailing winds,

And the ocean’s painful roar,

I turn my head to bar the sight,

Of that elemental war. 

Reviews

[lily]

I love the several contrasting elements you have, and I don't know if that was completely intentional, but it works really well in my opinion. It's also paints a very interesting picture, which I love. The way you write is very unique, and I'd love to see more!

[Kieran Shuttleworth]

Thanks for the review! I know next to nothing about professional poetry, so you'd be correct in assuming the better aspects of this piece were kind of unintentional. Hopefully my future output doesn't disappoint!

[Hogwarts]

I really like this. I seriously read it like 5 times. This is just amazing.

[scarlynn]

I love the comparison of war and nature, it makes for great imagery. This is such a nice length too, and it sounds like something classic. Great reading.

[Kieran Shuttleworth]

Thank you for the kind words. Experimenting with imagery was my goal for this piece, I'm glad it has paid off. :)

[Ryze Poetix]

such a beautiful sound it has