Feelings

are we who we show we are?

A smile to mask the pain

A mask to hide the face

A face not showing it's true self

Hiding the feelings that show who I am.

Afraid of what you think

Afraid to be me...

Laugh on the outside

Cry on the inside

Never let you see

What i really can be.

Author's Note

I like this one:)

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

In ten lines, you've managed to make me speechless. Good thing I have a computer and don't rely on my speech, lol. Nonetheless, this poem is extraordinary in it's message and delivery. Though I'd work on rhyming and rhythm a bit more. And seperating this into two stanza's of word. Five on the top and five on the bottom... or not, up to you.

Just remember that you are writing to your reader, this is not to you. Make your reader feel at easy. Rhythm and rhyme tend to help relax a reader and grab the reader's attention. Again, the message is beautiful. Please continue. :D

[Comatose]

This one is nice...well done ^^

[The Flawed]

I like it, very raw and honest it reminds me of a couple of my own writings " A Total Wasted Of Time" and "Disturbed", please take a look at them if you get the time and let me know what you think.
Well done, great work.

[Jess.]

Wow, I really like this!
Its short, but still very powerful!
I can relate to it also.
Nice write! =)