Life

yes this is kind of weird but i like it lol

I touch the door with my fingertips and it bursts-it jumps away like a terrified deer-and I plunge into the silent hearth-lit hall with a laugh that i wouldn't care much to wake up to.

The flickering fire luminates the i dim hall and creates eerie shadows. silence meets my ears as I call to whomever laughed. I'm met only with a disturbing growl from behind me, and when I look back...nothing is there.

I swear I see images fo people and faces along the wall trying to reach toward me. A chill enters my bones while my breath escapes me in a fog. Dread and adrenaline race through my veins.

I fight my senses, but lose and start running down the hall. Voices & Screams come to me as my feet pound on the floor. It grows louder and louder till its almost deafening then it all stops one I reach a room. a fire is buring in the chimney while a chair is faced to it. I approach the back of the chair while my heart beats profusely.

I turn the chair and--I wake up in a sweat. I beg myself to rememver what was in it, but was dissapointed. Suddenly it comes to me...I was in the chair watching my own reaction upon finding...myself.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[SilentDreamer]

Nice. I think maybe it needs revision on the puncuation and grammar mistakes. Those mistakes make it a bit hard to read. However I like this. The ending- very nice. Creative. I'm glad I read it. Good job. I hope you keep writing on the darker side of things because you are good at it. I think you're a good writer. :D Keep it up.

[Sarah]

hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha i remember doing this too!!!!!!! It was good times loL! very good though i liked it alot

[Jeff Miller]

Nice

[Magdelena]

I agree with ell on the grammer part. The rest real nice. You have talent for sure. Love the darkness inside of this.. The feelings hidden that came out inside your transe-like dreams.. You do have the way with the dark side, so i would polish that a bit more and see what comes forth.. otherwise great piece...


Mag xx

[Darien Thomas Bragg]

A little heavy on the prose, this prose-poem, but I like the gothic feel. Nice little twist at the end.