13

13 nights, 13
days, 13 more lies before
she turns in her grave.

Author's Note

I was watching TV when I thought about this. I saw some commercial and it said something about the number 13. I thought about and then wrote it down in my notebook, thinking I might use it latter. The next day I got to looking at it and found out it was a haiku. So hope ya like it :)

Reviews

[Allyson Wolfe]

I agree with Legolas. It is well written and is eerie, yet also sends a clear message; something will happen in 13 days. I love it, and I don't usually like haikus!

[Speak in Silence]

Aw thank you :)

[Legolas]

Great haiku. It has a haunting feeling to it. So much said in so few words. Good job.

[Speak in Silence]

Thanks :)

[Wolfwind]

For a random pour out of poetry this is wonderful! But I have to admit, it reminds me of a trailer for a movie or something and I keep thinking, so where's the rest of the story!! =)
Awesome Ink!

Aaron

[Speak in Silence]

Thanks :)

[Fréyjä Helv..]

It's thrilling... got me chills somehow... nice work...

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[Miguel]

That's cool that this turned out to work as a haiku/senryu unintentionally. :) I find it really intriguing - it makes me want to know a little bit more about the backstory. It's still very cool standing alone, though!

Whatever you choose to do with it, I think it works very well. :)

(I don't know if you know anything about it, but this seriously makes me think of the TV series Pretty Little Liars) :P


~Miguel

[Speak in Silence]

thank you :) lol I have never really watched that show before :P

[Mr. Lou]

They are three great lines but Im confused. Is this all? That is what I think when I read this. Haiku's are a bit tricky due to how short they must be, I understand, but these lines sound like part of a story. Mustn't leave the audience in such fashion, Miss May I Murder. Or perhaps I am missing something and if I am please let me know.

[Speak in Silence]

I thought of this while watching TV, I honestly just wrote it down thinking that I might use it in a poem or story and then I discovered that it was a Haiku so I just thought I would leave it at that.

[Mr. Lou]

Ah to hell with it. A piece is a piece. But its a good idea, hell even I drew an idea from it, so you show totally use it later.

[Speak in Silence]

I might use it latter

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Very intense. I love the energy in this piece. Great job:)

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[Pax]

i agree intense in such short manner...

[Speak in Silence]

Thanks :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

wow. Such an intense poem packed into three lines! I loved this because it didn't read like a Haiku (an usually I'mvery skepticalof those). Very very well done! Its stated so casually that you feel the darknessand sorrow and stress that makes her want to dies just waiting to rumble up! Loved it

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :D

[Lost in Wonderland]

no problem:) its no small feat to get me to really enjoy a Haiku:) thank for sending me a request for it

[Speak in Silence]

oh you're welcome, I just wanted to "get my work out there" know what I mean??

[Lost in Wonderland]

yeah of couse I do:)