Drifting

Sometimes I don't quite know what to do with myself

I feel as though I'm floating

As though even the ropes and rocks that are holding

couldn't hold tight enough 

to keep me from drifting

I am a broken ship without an anchor

A floating bird without wings

The wind just sits still, it no longer sings

I am still as can be

Laying here, wondering

Can you just take me away?

Reviews

[Alira]

I would definitely recommend the use of punctuation in the first stanza. I love the ship without an anchor, but maybe eliminate the word "broken"? It kind of takes away the impact that you could have with just "I am a ship without an anchor,/ a bird floating without wings". I also like the idea that the wind "sings". It's uncommon (common being that the wind howls, etc) and it sticks with me, gives me a new perspective. Great poem!

RA