Apart.

She loved him forever
he never loved her whatsoever,
without him, she never imagined could be
so hard to flee.

"I love him."
she said with so prim.
"She's scary."
He said with a worry.

She never thought they'd part,
being stitched at heart.
Soon she learned,
that he burned
each moment they shared.
She thought he cared.

All those times she caught him lying
she thought she'd keep trying.
She was his deary,
she thought, tho he got weary.

Soon it ended in a heart-break
she wished she had a retake.
She loved him forever,
he never loved her whatsoever...

Reviews

[R.A. Youngblood]

This is very sad, emotional and desperation flows in it! You could clean grammatic errors, like "She is scary", or,"whatsoever", it's nice to hear and play like that with the words, but it's kind a difficult to read, i agree with Alex and Captain, you don't have to listen to me, just a thought! Anyway, it's written from heart, and i really like it! Thanks for sharing..Well done!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I wanted to cry while reading this.
I can totally relate to this. You know exactly what I mean D:
This is an excellent poem. Great job. :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Alex Vidmar]

I have to agree with Captain on this one, However. This is really good nonetheless.

[Captain]

A lot of the wording is hard to understand.
"without him, she never imagined could be
so hard to flee."
"she said with so prim."
"She never thought they'd part,
being stitched at heart."
being some examples of points I felt were awkward and difficult to read. Look it over maybe?
'Captain