Poisons of Power

Poisons of Power

A Poem by Nina St. Moritz
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The duality behind magic. Is it worth using for its rewards, despite the cost? CONSTRUCTIVE REVIEWS NEEDED!

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We are the whispers behind every spell,
the twist of your voice and the ring of the bell.
The power your words evoke into life,
we give of ourselves with a stroke of the knife.

The magic you seek to tame and harness
is by its nature far from harmless.
This power you weave from the depths of the earth
brings shadows and darkness outweighing its worth.

Trust in us and heed the warnings we give,
for we know all that has and all that will live.
The secrets within the bones of this world
to us are open as leaves newly unfurled.

The rewards of this magic you willfully use
are grand as was promised by spellbook's ruse.
Yet between every word are the sibilant lies
of the darkness behind power that hides from your eyes.

No matter the simplest wish you may cast,
each dip into magic leaves scars that will last.
Though deep they reside and hard to discover,
they ruin the mind like a treacherous lover.

We are the chaos behind every spell,
the shroud of the dead and the toll of the knell.
Hark and hear the warnings we speak.
Magic gives much and more does it wreak.

© 2012 Nina St. Moritz


Author's Note

Nina St. Moritz
I need at least ten constructive reviews on this piece to allow it to be considered for an e-book anthology on fantasy. Please help! I need reviews with actual constructive substance, not something like "Good job" or "Great poem."

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Wow, it's hard to be constructive on a poem so good it need no more construction!
this is fantastic and that anthology will be lucky to have you.
It's a difficult subject to deliver-- the subtleties of magical corruption, so it's a great accomplishment to pull it off like you did. I think what makes it powerful is the fact that you're given these words an ethereal author in the first and last stanzas... "We are the whispers behind every spell" It definitely gave me the chills!


Posted 11 Years Ago


I really liked this poem, although I struggled with the third verse. I wander if it would be stronger without it?


Posted 11 Years Ago


I think that you have done an excellent job with the rhythm and meter in this piece. It reads fluidly and the content is quite thought provoking. I like the first two lines of that penultimate stanza and particularly like that last line of the poem. It is conclusive and yet encourages deliberation... :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Congratulations this poem has been "approved" for publication in...

THE MAGICAL MYTHICAL MYSTERY COMPENDIUM.
-Metaphysical, Mystical & Fantastical Poetry of the Arcane

By John Phoenix Hutchinson and Others. (c) 2012

Please feel free to submit other poems as you are not limited to one entry. Also please write a short "bio" about yourself and send to me via private message. This will be published along with your poem. Thanks J.P.H.

Anyone wanting to make Submissions to this Writers Cafe "e" book Project can do so on my group page, the deadline is 1st of November 2012.

Posted 12 Years Ago


John Phoenix Hutchinson.

12 Years Ago

Made an executive decision on this one and its in. :)
Nina St. Moritz

12 Years Ago

Thank you so much! This means a lot for the poem to be accepted. :D
this is really great!
i like that its from the voice of the "spirits"
and its flow is almost like a spell in itself
this is a great write
i really enjoyed it!!!

100/100



Posted 12 Years Ago


Nina St. Moritz

12 Years Ago

Thanks for reviewing! I really wanted to go for the whole spell-like aura, because the warning is co.. read more
I love the "We are" aspect of this poem like they are magical guardians protecting, warning about the dangers of dabbling in the occult. Rhymes well and I can see what the others mean about the title.
A good write though and fingers crossed :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


I agree with Lothlorien about title it needs a more magical mystical edge.

The poem is quite unique as you dont see that many works with warnings of the dangers of magic. You have expressed that well here and your rhymes are not clumsy but flow quite well.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nina St. Moritz

12 Years Ago

Thanks! The title is getting revamped. Definitely.
A poem about the darker side of magic. Neatly set out and well rhymed.
A very enjoyable poem with no weakness except for one, for me the title does not fit theme of the work the word beautiful seems out of place here.......I would of chosen a darker more magical word to place in front of chaos. Otherwise a quality piece I hope this get the reviews it deserves and needs.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nina St. Moritz

12 Years Ago

Thank you for reviewing! And I think I will change the title. It was more of an on-the-spot title. T.. read more

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