S**t

S**t

A Poem by Liz
"

A conversation (kind of) I had today.

"
My fingers 
Drum 
Drum 
Drum against my leg.

I gnaw on my lip,
Lick off the blood,
Rinse, 
Lather, 
Repeat. 

My leg shakes, 
My whole body shakes.

My eyes droop downwards,
Like drops of water.
My tangled hair swishes as I
Shake away the fatigue.
"You look like s**t."

I stare over at the boy. 
Giggle, shrug.

"S**t suits me, I think."

© 2010 Liz


Author's Note

Liz
I'm really enjoying writing like this, could you tell?

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hardcore!~ I like the raw honesty~ the last line brings it home perfectly~ lol

Posted 14 Years Ago


I enjoyed reading it. Very great ending! Thanks!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Haha this is great (: I love it! It's so natural and real

Posted 14 Years Ago


Loved it. I loved the carelessness of the speaker when saying that s**t suits them. No one has to look their best 100% of the time.

Posted 14 Years Ago


truly, a fantastic piece! It's blunt and is extremely well written. I reallllllllly like this, good work! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nice poem

Posted 14 Years Ago


interesting last line if it suits you :) I like the style

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is great. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


its kind of a surprise at the end :) i liked it. why was the character gnawing on her lip over and over?

Posted 14 Years Ago


I'm pretty sure I can tell you're having fun. I love dialog in writing, and you seem to have quite a knack for it. Whatever happened to you, don't stop. This is very good stuff I've been reading. Keep writing and playing with these situational dialogs. Can't wait for new ones! Thanks

Posted 14 Years Ago



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