A Writer's Mind

Fervent scene's running through my mind

For novel's whose name's i have yet to find

They run around in a constant rewind

Editing themselve's until I feel I can call them mine

A writer's mind is a busy place

Not just an open space

It is filled with idea's so lively they could be their own race

Scene's and idea's written on paper

Scene's I edit to make my character's safer

Filling my notebooks to the brim

Finding new paper is a task always grim

Pencil to paper, lead staining the page

I write this poem on a bumpy ride in a yellow rectangluar cage

Dreading the day that's inevitable to come

I feel the bumps in the road, like the beating of drum

I've quite lost my original topic

As I near the school I think it toxic

I'm going to have to exit into the school hallway's thrum

My heart in my chest is beating like a bongo drum

It's hard to stop my fervent writing

Since as I walk toward the door's it's school I'm spiting.

Author's Note

Constructive critisism please

Reviews

[hogan]

This is so good, I was a teacher for 25 years and always hated what each person, as a 'child' was put through. All young people deserve respect for who they are not what they are. The yellow cage haunted me, I had to shepherd pupils onto a school bus like cattle, I am so glad I left. Now I have my own business and can detach from the institutionalization of our next generation. Really hope you have the confidence to develop your creativity, this work is brilliant.

[MissEpic2902]

Thank you so much! :) This made my day!

[hogan]

And reading your work made mine!

[MissEpic2902]

Lol :) well I'm glad to have made your day!

[Draven]

Well, what is there to critisise, my dear? This just became my new favorite poem on this site.

[MissEpic2902]

Well Thank you! I'm happy to have given you a favorite poem! :)

[Jack Reaper]

never have i seen something on this subject that ive look at and almost thought it came from myself. reading this was like looking into my own mind. except for the school part anyway, been out of that cage for some time now. wonderful nonetheless.

[MissEpic2902]

Thank you so much!! :D I appreciate that!!

[Sami Khalil]

Pencil to paper
lead staining the cage.
Nice write.

[MissEpic2902]

Thank you! :) I appreciate that!!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[RachelReaper]

Writing isn't meant to be stopped, its meant to be written all the time (even in school) , and I love this soo much! It reminds me of my imagination lobby where all of my characters from different stories and books go to socialize when I'm not writing about them. This was awesome.

[MissEpic2902]

Lol Thank you!! :D

[Jetta Zippora]

Written very well. It flows great and it speaks loudly to all writers. :) I love this poem, friend. Quite awesome.

[MissEpic2902]

lol thank you! :) I really appreciate this!!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great journey of a writer's mind you took me on! Craft nicely!

[MissEpic2902]

Thank you so much!! i really appreciate this!! :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Welcome!

[MissEpic2902]

:D Yay!!

[Ella]

"Filling my notebooks to the brim
Finding new paper is a task always grim"
Oh my stars, so true! I love this, it is exactly what my mind is like! Amazing write, the flow of it... stunning. You're such an amazing writer! One of my favourite pieces of all time.

[MissEpic2902]

Lol Thank you! :D

[Ella]

Welcome :)

[MissEpic2902]

:)

[Katharine Eilene]

Very creative. I like it.

[MissEpic2902]

Thank you!!

[Zeph]

Awesome!

[MissEpic2902]

lol thanks!