First Fall, Last Fall

Free falling 

Wings stretching

Birds calling

Tripping on my thoughts

Misguided by desire

Almost there, almost caught

Free falling

It's over now

Mother's calling

Death has kissed my brow

                              

Reviews

[Laura Lynn]

I like the line breaks and the feeling of falling I get from them. I like that "tripping on my thoughts" concept, with is a nice metaphor that I had not thought of my mind getting caught and tripping up that way, but truly it does. I love the comma and break in "Almost there, almost caught" ...there is something really quite brilliant there in the symmetry only because the Greek philosophers wrote about this symmetry as an essential element of our definitions of what it means to be beautiful

[Miss Bloom]

Thank you so much! I'm happy you enjoyed it.

[stars are far]

That was feeling of distrbance, you did a well job keep it coming

[Nikki]

Adored. Great start, keep them coming!