Secrets

I whisper all my secrets

on your lips.

In every bite and

every kiss.

 

I give you more of me

than you'll ever know.

Or more than you ever

knew.

 

I whisper all my sins,

you promised that this

would never happen again.

 

I whisper all my secrets

on your lips.

Asking for forgiveness. 

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

ooooh, delicious. There's something so sensuous about it...because you're talking about lips. Of course there is mystery, because you're talking about secrets. But then there's that something else that I can't quite put a word on. It's serene in a way and certainly leaves the reader with much to ponder. I'd say: great piece!!!!

[Michael X]

Whispering secrets onto the lips of a lover's forgiveness.. and with every breath.. surrendering intent,
jane.. this is a well written poem that draws the reader to a delving state of pondering the design of

romance.. love, its effects on the heart.. in terms of reading... you capture specific emotions revealing
what it means to desire the embrace the solitude of understanding..I like the aspect of sinning-

as a way of tearing down.. and only the touch of the one close to your heart can bring the soul
back to its feet..'secrets have a way of consuming until either delt with and revealed..nicely done

[Irresistaby Irish]

Wow.... I love this!!! It's fantastic!

[Stacey]

Ahhh I love the first stanza. Your poems always seem to tell some story that is beyond my comprehension, but I like the mystery. When a poem's meaning is clear and set in stone it can lose the feeling and just turn into a simple narration.

You capture and abstractness that I always seem to lack :x

[RAWR!]

secrets! poems about secrets is unfair,
they make me curious!! ^^

well done miss mary jane

[Mistral Bilgera]

i like reading short poems with a little air of mysticism around them, and that despite their briefness, says a lot and makes me picture out what's going on in the poem.

very good piece. keep it up :)