loves pain

 

Things that bloom

seasons sweet tune

baby cries

mircles arise

things to come

loves undone

my sunset

his fun

heart achs

pains awake

lovely lie

silent cry

tears heart

fake smile

moves on

pain never gone............

 

 

Reviews

[Allison]

I love this. It's really good.

One of my favorites I've ever read on here. :)

Only thing I can think to say is check the spelling.

[Sseoni]

What an amazing piece! I loved it! Great use of rhyme! Love's pain is so painful, yet you've created a beautiful poem! Wonderful writing! :D

[BABSIE BEE]

Clever,
Thank you
Babsie Bee xx

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awesome

[Serend1p1ty]

This grabbed my heart.
So well done.
I don't even know what else to say, but this really appeals to me.
My word, nicely done.
"things to come
loves undone
my sunset
his fun" - This part of it just jumped out at me.
It just paints such a vivid imaginative picture for me.
Really though, great work.

Yours truly,
cloud6

[Madara Uchiha]

nice misa it sound real good unlike most of mine. ^///^

[Spoken]

this is an interesting style. Stecatto lines that paint an image of a story thru projecting short flashes into the mind. Very well rounded and complete. I like