Take Back your Promises

You've changed my own features, made me live your lie, now take back all those promises you once made, and let me find myself.

Take Back your Promises


Alone in the stillness of the night

Staring at my face gazing back at me

Through the mirror… through the hazy light

I see a shadow of the woman I used to be…

I watch the wasted days of my life

Shoving off in my own eyes

Cold memories cut like a knife

As sharp as your chilling lies...

My love relentlessly misused

Fading in the grayness of your apathy

My dreams savagely abused

Shrilling… wailing for empathy

There are no more chances I want to take

No more oceans for us to sail

Making me believe anything was my mistake

My fault when anything should fail

There are no more roads for us to walk

No prospect for us to succeed

My heart you willfully broke

A miracle is what we’ll need

I won’t drown in my illusions anymore

Time has come to see the plain truth

Thinking it could ever be like before

Is wasting away my life and youth

You’ve put me on the run for quite so long 

Living in your deceiving delusion

Swaying in those foggy places amid right and wrong

I’ve reached nothing but loss and confusion

Astray… rolling in your circle in the sand

I’m always back to the point of start

I won’t search for reasons to understand

Why we are ending so far apart

You left me nothing but a heartache

And a heap of dreams thrown aside

So take back all the promises you’re yet to make

And give me back my wounded pride… ©

ღ MiRa ღ

Author's Note

Reviews

[KAin]

Strong work, emotion brilliantly expressed in this piece. Heartfelt words, that demand an honest reading of it, as well as an earnest understanding.
You've maintained your rhyme scheme well without losing the meaning in your message - sometimes that is a flaw among the writers of this site - so well done on managing to maintain the thread and power of your message throughout.
It has the feeling of a pride that has begun to remember itself, and to recognize that it deserved more than what it got.
Well written, Mira. Keep up the good work.

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thank you as usual your review is deep and filled with constructive positivity .. thank you

[Katrina Mckeown]

Strong emotions, this touched me , I’ve been there. Very well portrayed , I hope you found yourself again your true spirit and belief in yourself. Love your rhyming and rhythm.

[Dark Empress]

A strong poem, very well written. It has a powerful message. Thank you for sharing

[wordman]

my second look sad but beautiful leaving all your dreams behind,starting a new life
hoping for a new start ,but yet feeling all alone all is lost

[Sheila Marie Carr]

Wow! This touched home with me...I most definitely relate to this.
Thank you for sharing.

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thank you Sheila .. I know the feeling when we relate to something we read .. we find our own reflection in someone else's writing and it feels simply .. talking about the {me} inside .... Thank you

[Jerry Ables]

Strong emotions expressed so eloquently, Mira:) The read is appreciated very much:) May you and yours stay ever peaceful and safe:)

[Mira ThePoetess]

Thank you Jerry

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

A powerful and haunting piece. I especially like the second stanza as she finally realizes the time she has lost in her quest for love, unfortunately something that you can never reclaim due to the ravages of time. Brilliant work.

[Baby Ricochet]

Brings to mind a woman talking to her eating disorder. Pretty heavy stuff. Good work.

[spiritwind]

usually I find music distracting. This time, however, the music was an integral part of the experience.

[Mira ThePoetess]

thank you .. I find the songs distracting for I like reading poems aloud ... that's why I prefer music only instrumental...

[FlamingPhoenix]

If I was seeking a piece to defy and surpass the term perfection, I most assuredly found it in the reading of this piece. There are way too many lines that stood out to me to quote, but you have impressed me beyond all scope of anything I have read thus far. Perhaps it is because I can relate, and yet so much beyond that--your ability to pen is stunning to state the least! Congratulations on the mastering of your craft in this brilliant piece!

[Mira ThePoetess]

Woww .... that sure touched my heart in a way that you got my eyes filled with tears Flaming Phoenix ..... thank you so much .... well I've entered many contest with this piece hoping I will win .... but now it's only enough to be read by people like you .....