5 Minute Poetry

All my words just trickle into the empty blank space so all my poetry is free verse

Love is an illusive illusion.
Playing tricks on us.
Slowly,
as it places a small gentle kiss on our hearts.
No wonder its notorious for being playful.
Attracting these unknown feelings that gently resides in us
However, when the feelings of each side is different,
then it's nothing more then a joke.

Love is a beautiful reality
As it uses the bonds that we create with others like thread to sew up our torn selves
It embraces us and reassures us that we are not alone
No wonder we grow under its care
Introducing us to these sweet feelings that we tend to and care for
However, if both sides are seeing the same illusion, the love becomes true.

Now the question is,
Is your love the Illusive Illusion or the Beautiful Reality

Author's Note

I apologize about my grammar and structure, English is my third language but I appreciate all tips,comments and criticism. Thank you!

Reviews

[Superlolp]

In the first stanza, I think the word "confusing" should be omitted, and the line "Slowly as it places a small gentle kiss on our hearts," should be cut into two lines after the word slowly. It will make it stand out more. Also, rather than "...........", you should just make two separate lines.

Of course, though, it is your choice whether or not to change any of this.

Other than those things, this poem is very beautiful. I LOVE how the first and second stanzas relate to each other, and each line relates to the line relative to it on the other stanza.

[DoctorX]

Thank you very much! I also thought about creating it into two sentences but I was very unsure. I really appreciate your feedback and thank you for your kind words :)
I will follow through with your feedback, it does look more appealing that way. (o^^o)

I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed it!