Misunderstanding.

      Ramona was sweating profusely in the scorching heat of the sun.She was standing in the parking lot of the university.She called her fiance,Effron telling him about his favourite chocolate brownie that she had just bought him and was waiting for him in the parking lot.Effron said,''Sorry Ramona,I'm in my French class, can't miss it.You enjoy! Bye.''

      Some of the girls of university were jealoused of Ramona's relation with Effron.While Ramona was looking sadly at her mobile screen one of the girls said,''Ahh..well.there are lots of pretty girls in the university,why would Effron look at the ugly ones? Haha'',she said casting Ramona an evil eye.They laughed enjoying Ramona's expressions.Ramona left immediately.
      Days passed,and Ramona felt Effron was really changing.Everytime she tried going close to him,he made some excuse and told her he was busy.This made Ramona really tensed.One day Effron even insulted her in the class only when she had asked him for some of his time.''Is Effron really changing or is it me,the one who's over-reacting?'' Ramona thought.
      Then one afternoon in the university,Effron came to Ramona,held her hands and said looking in the eye,''Ramona,it's been long since i last gave you a surprise.So..come to my home this evening.I have a surprise for you'',he smiled.Ramona wanted to jump and scream and laugh! That made her really happy.''Sure'',she replied smiling.They held eachother's gaze for a couple of minutes,then left.
      Ramona was getting ready.She wore black eye-shadow and a beautiful red lipstick.And her diamond necklace that suited her alot.She kept on smiling all the time.Ramona was now ready.She sat in the car and the engine roared to life!
      She pressed the bell button.And somebody acquired on the intercom,''who is it?'' ''It's me,Ramona'',she said.The door opened and a maid servant appeared.''Madam,Mr.Effron isn't home'',she told Ramona.''What! He isn't home?!'',Ramona said in disappointment.While she was just turning back,she caught a glimpse of Effron watching T.V.Saying nothing,Ramona left in a fit of rage.
      Once she reached home,she went running to her mother's room.She took off her beautiful engagement ring and threw it away.It fell down with a thud on the wooden floor where it lay silently.Ramona cried and told her mother that she broke off with Effron.Her mother was very disturbed to see Ramona in such a condition.Ramona told her mom everything and asked her not to see Effron at all or not to listen to him even if he calls or comes here himself! She then rushed upstairs to her room.
      Ramona had never felt so much pain in her entire life.She was heart-broken.She felt absolutely awful.As if a storm had come and it took away everything from her..She was torn into pieces..But soon she started going out.And changed her university.She started hanging out with her new friends.And life became quite normal for her..
Nine months passed.
      Ramona's mother was getting ready for a marriage one day and asked Ramona to accompany her.Ramona agreed.
      In the glittery environment of the marriage,Ramona was amazed to see ''Two Effrons'' instead of one.Only a discerning eye could tell that the other was slightly taller than Effron.The other one started walking towards Ramona and she soon had butterflies in the stomach.
      ''Hi Ramona'',he said.''Hi'',she tried to smile.''I am Jack.Jack Smith,Effron's brother.Ramona,i'm sorry you might not even want to listen to me right now but it's important because my brother is very important to me.. after that day when you came to our house,my brother stayed very upset,everytime he tried to talk,neither you nor your mother replied but once she only told us that you saw Effron in home that day.His life really turned bad.But all I want to say is that day when you came,it was me whom you saw.Effron was out,preparing for your surprise,he got a little late.I'm sorry Ramona we never had a chance to meet as I was in England for my studies'',he said. Ramona did know Effron had a brother but never knew he is a "twin brother." Ramona slumped into the sofa,sobbing.

Reviews

[Border]

Dear Mirab.
Salutations from an Indian, on the excellent short story that has been penned with sensitivity and not a single line appears artificial.
You have a great talent that is waiting to be brought on the world stage.
I can foresee that you will indeed write a breezy novel, that would sell at Airports, for passengers to read on a 3 hour flight. You have an easy way of writing, and mind you, it is very difficult to write with ease, that is an effortless read.
Keep it up.
You will become one of the leading Pakistani writers in the times to come.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This appears unaltered Mirab?

[Mirab Irfan]

It's altered now! Give it another read,please :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Where is is altered Mirab?

[Mirab Irfan]

At the end.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah I missed that. A clever way to to turn it around!

[Ajay]

Very nicely written mirab, i like it very much.

[Mirab Irfan]

Thankyou very much :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very very sad tale of just how life can interfere with love and trust and that not all things are as they seem. A few gaps in the story though. If she was engaged to Effron how did she not know about the brother?!

[Mirab Irfan]

Haha.True :) But i wated to sound it like just a few months before they got engaged and she didn't know much yet.All she knew was that he did have a brother but not a twin brother! :)

[Mirab Irfan]

And thankyou John :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

But she was already engages as she threw her ring away? One would not get engaged to someone without knowing something about them and as the brother's lived in the same house it seems rather improbable? One needs to proof read your stories or get someone else to do so in order not to fall into such a trap.

[Mirab Irfan]

Ah,i missed a line at the end! Thankyou John.Greateful to you! :)