Magical it is, Magical it has always been, Setting hearts on fire, Melting them to gold, Unbridling the joy, Like in the stories it was told, When you pull up the corners of your naked lips, Into that beautiful Smile..
Awesome piece my friend! There is nothing more beautiful than a smile... well except on evil people haha... awesome work and pretty smile on your picture as well :)
A smile is never beautiful if its straight
No one meet people on straight roads
When we have have a smile curved
Like a curved road for instance
A curved road is far more bigger and greater than a straight one
More the curve more the friends you have on the road
Surely great poem
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Your review is highly appreciated.Thankyou Ashwin.
I read the poem many times, and understood each line but, I do not know if I am receiving the author's message correctly. I do not know! Taking the gold and melting it down and then reshaping it into something beautiful like the example with the lips into a smile.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
True that,Perkele.A heart melts into gold when it watches a beautiful smile :)
And thankyou s.. read moreTrue that,Perkele.A heart melts into gold when it watches a beautiful smile :)
And thankyou so much.
Jacob,let me be honest,the inspiration behind my poem is you.
This happened after reading ''c.. read moreJacob,let me be honest,the inspiration behind my poem is you.
This happened after reading ''crayoned skin''!
Thankyou so much :)
9 Years Ago
wow thank you for letting me know that...i am encouraged if my words can inspire such a write as thi.. read morewow thank you for letting me know that...i am encouraged if my words can inspire such a write as this.
j.
9 Years Ago
You're welcome Jacob and Thankyou for making me write something like that!
A really interesting and beautifully written poem. One could never really think there could be so much to a smile. Amazing poem! :)
Magical it is,
Magical it has always been,
A nice way to start the poem and a very touching description. Whoever you wrote it for must've been on cloud nine after reading this. Beautifully written. :)
Setting hearts on fire,
I like the depth of this simple sentence. It's such a sweet way of saying how their smile kindles love. Amazingly well-written. :)
Melting them to gold,
This struck me as another way of saying ''I'd die for a smile''. Nicely written. :)
When you pull up the corners of your naked lips,
Into that beautiful Smile..
I loved this part. It gives life to the rest of the poem. Great lines and the perfect way of ending the poem.
A really, really excellent poem. Keep up the good work. :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thankyou so much Bushra.
Your review is always highly appreciated by me.You really motivate m.. read moreThankyou so much Bushra.
Your review is always highly appreciated by me.You really motivate me by saying all the good stuff in the right way and at times correct me where i go wrong,again,in the right way.
Thanks again for such a wonderful review! :)