Part One

It was July 2001. We were going through a really hot Summer season.I really loved those days though. I mean what is there not to love? People walking in the Park, family gatherings everywhere, that delicious smell of barbecue going on in almost every house, Baseball games on the television,kids playing on the streets. But my favorite part of the Summer was when it rained, I could be looking out of the window as the fresh and cold drops filled the ground.

That afternoon it was supposed to be like any other, after being at the house all morning I decided to go to Central Park to take a walk with my loyal cockapoo dog Jester. Even he was just a puppy he would follow me everywhere, and every time I took him with me to the park, people would stop and ask me If they could pet him, and he surely loved all the attention he got.

After walking for about almost an hour, I decided to sit on a bench and take a break. I grabbed my half full bottle of water and drank it all. Jester was lying on the grass and he was sticking out his tongue. Looking everywhere, I noticed all kind of people, parents playing with their little kids, elderly people talking slow walks, and couples about all ages walking together holding hands. That was what usually caught my attention. It had been so long since I have dated someone, that, every time I saw a couple kiss, I always wondered what would it feel like?. I had forgotten that feeling of being kissed, of being wanted, being loved by someone that way.

Unfortunately most of my past relationships had ended for strange reasons I never completely understood. And to be honest I was starting to feel fine and complete without love in my life, maybe I had developed some kind of Love immunity. But anyway that usual afternoon soon turned into very unusual.

Author's Note

Please Ignore Grammar problems, however if you have to point a grammar error just be brief. And let me know your thoughts about this. Thanks!

Reviews

[Æ Chronicle]

This was very sweet. I love the story, and everything about it. I can picture the scenes as you explain them; the beautiful summer's day, walking in the park, the families. It is very romantic, even though, in the story, you are alone.

You use a lot of realistic descriptions to bring the story to life and add depth to it. Again, I really like the reality of the entire story, how I can picture myself being there.

There are a lot of grammatical errors, and I mean a lot. Most of it doesn't affect the story and how it is read, but some of it does, and it's important to change those, so I'll only point out these few, specific ones:

"I mean what there is not to love?."

This almost seems like a deliberate mistake, and if it was, then it makes it interesting, but I believe it should be; "I mean what is there not to love?" You also don't need to have a period after the question mark.

"But, my top favorite part of the Summer was when it rained, I could be looking out of the window as the rain was falling all day long."

Here, in the first five words, there isn't actually a grammatical error, but saying, "...my top favorite part of the Summer..." makes you almost sound ignorant, like you don't know how to speak well. Not that this is a bad thing, but it just doesn't flow with the feel of the story. The second thing that I noticed is how you repeat yourself here a little bit. Saying, "...was when it rained, I could be looking out of the window as the rain was falling all day long." Here you have all ready established that you love it when it rains in the Summer, and then you say pretty much the same thing again, in the same sentence. It's a little run-on-ish (excuse my un-hoity-toity language,) but it could easily be fixed by simply exchanging the second "rain" with a little poetic description of rain itself. This would also help boost the beauty of the story.

And last but not least, so I don't overwhelm you or make you think this isn't a good piece of work;

"...people would stop and asking me If they could pet him..."

It should be "ask" not "asking" which changes the flow and feel of the story again. There are a few more points that I would personally change, but they aren't big.

Overall, this is a nice piece of work and I enjoyed reading it through. I look forward to reading the other chapters.

Thank you Marcy C Chavez!

[Marcy Chavez]

First of all, I want to thank you for taking the time to read my work and for leaving me such a helpful review, I really appreciate it when other writers, more experimented than me help me out and give me tips and correct my grammar errors. I changed the ones you point out here and this time I hope I got them right.
I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter and hopefully my grammar will get better in the next chapters.
Really Really thanks!!

-Marcy

[Æ Chronicle]

Thanks for giving me something to read.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Short little chapter but i enjoyed it :)
Has a great little story line to it.
I was also picturing the sceanes as you wrote them, i think most people do :)
Great write :)

[Neon]

This's a nice starting of the chapter, yeah, your right, if we can't do anything tomorrow then don't do anything "Today" that's a pretty impressive thought, that's what that grabbed my attention and made me curious reading this more deeply. Yeah, this chapter says much oneself, you felt something in your heart "Once Again" about the feeling of love that you felt once in your life when you saw the couple of people around their on the park holding each ones hands walking on the park slowly-slowly and so on .. you felt the feelings of love, the depth of the love, the purity, the mist of the lips, the eyes, the feelings of being kissed by someone smoothly , feeling of being into the arms of someone beautifully, being loving by someone honestly and of course, you felt the feel of the love that raised into the depth of your heart by seeing those couple of "Loved ones" on the park... you once again got lost into the past of yours where you were into the arms of someone happily and enjoying the time with the life lovingly but something, as we all know love does always hurts so it does hurt you too, come outta the world of love and you felt alone but when you saw loved ones, you again raised the feeling the love, being kissed by someone to feel the breeze of the lips once again and the title suited on you with the words well that "Tomorrow does come again" yeah, well said and this chapter makes it all clear about it...because once when you were in love of someone in past, today you are not so in love and your tomorrow is what that your today is because if in today, there's your love with you then it might be with you tomorrow either but if the loved one's with you today then it might be not with you tomorrow and that's exactly what happened to you, with your life because, you've lost your love, your came outta the love, the life of someone and so on and that's what this chapter says that "TOMORROW NEVER COMES BACK AGAIN!"

What a splendid thought into the words, into the form of well penned chapter!
I enjoyed this!


That's all are my thoughts on this chapter. It's a nice chapter and I'd like to share something more with you as the thoughts, have a look below

"Love makes the life beautiful living but it's a love who spoils the life lovingly. Love never tells you to leave the world of peace, it's your heart that forces you to do so and the mind which wants you to."

[Marcy Chavez]

What a beautiful words you wrote at the end of your review, that was the part I loved the most!! I love your honest and beautiful thoughts about how love is so perfect and yet so complicated. I'm again so glad that you enjoyed this chapter, after all, that is the purpose of my writing.
Thank You!.

-Marcy

[Neon]

Your welcome again!

Yup, those words just came from my heart right after reading the chapter deeply .. it's your chapter that makes me feel so creative to jot down those words for you .. thanks.

Yup! What I wrote is true because "Love"s what that makes the life beautiful at the one hand and at the other hand it spoils the lives of someones at all .. but love's love and love's immortal because if you know how to love someone from the heart without giving hurt at all, you'll know what's a worth of love and what's a meaning of life because we're all trapped into the "Puzzles" of life and to solve this puzzle we gotta wake up and learn how to make smiles on the faces because smile is what that keeps every heart in a touch of love, a love of peace, a love of beauty, a love of heart and a love of life that's born with the life but love should be in a right way without hurting, without paining, without breaking and without crying or whipping ... because if love makes smiles on the faces then it's a love either that brings tears on the faces, it's just all on us, in our hands how to handle the love and how we stay away from pain with the love!

So, keep loving! Keep writing!
Keep smiling! Keep laughing!
Keep liking! and keep enjoying the moments of life because every day's new and we learn from this much more to grow up with the new talent.

You've got a very coolio talent to write and of course to understand depth of the words of someone as well .. and it's shows how creative and talented you are.

"Marcy!" Your soon gonna be a professional writer!
"Congratulations!" Ha!
Just keep on! Keep up the great work!