Conversion

It was almost February--

livid skyline sinking into the city,

moist air hanging like a mantle,

 

we locked ourselves out of the world,

in your rented room behind the theater

where drunks panhandled for pennies

and movies played all night long.

 

You wore a t-shirt and jeans,

holding that old acoustic guitar,

infusing the room with your voice--

you were a saint on a pilgrimage,

converting me a little more each day.   

 

When I closed my eyes I could see Utopia,

forever in the bosom of two great mountains,

a verdant valley split open by a vein of turquoise,

and as your notes suspended me

beneath a halcyon sky, I felt yearning

 

beyond rapture or salacity, more

than mere desire, I internalized the beating

of your youthful heart, and in that moment,

behind my insubstantial exterior I was Anath

ready to bleed for you gladly,

in protection or simply at your petition.

Reviews

[jhed]

Nice poem..very nice to read..Good job!

[Poetic Beauty]

This poem weaves a wonderful tale of young love. I love the flow of this poem. It paints a beautiful picture of two young lover's in a not so great room that has been rented. Even thought the surroundings aren't perfect the sound of his voice is, and that is all that matter in that moment. that is the picture that is paint for me in this poem. Makes me think of a few times when I was younger

[Art Sun]

Great work...a poem to repetively read and absorb...

deeply thought out poetry...

enjoyed...

[Ed Hart]

I'm waiting for chapter two

[Crowley]

Wow...you are awesome. You paint a very welcome picture in this one and a scene that evryone can dentify with and has hopefully enjoyed a time or two. My kind of day in for sure. Beautifully written, appreciatively read.

[Terry Collett]

Darn good poem. Fine expression of feelings and thoughts with words well combined.

[cest la vie]

Beautiful poem.. simply beautiful

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a wondrous reflection here, and a sense of longing for those moments... This account of two melting together simply comes alive through your vivid, emotional voice. I loved the sense of depth you create!

[Antonio Valentino]

MM, I've enjoyed everything I've read from you very much, but this, is my favorite so far. You're a wonderful storyteller who gives the reader a little more than they would expect, as they walk with you along the shadow of your words.

I am humbled by your pen.

Fantastic.
Antonio

[Ferg]

this is fabulous!
my favorite lines are:
"you were a saint on a pilgrimage,
converting me a little more each day. "
and
" ready to bleed for you gladly,
in protection or simply at your petition."
Undying devotion at its finest!
Just love it!