The monster

trying to get into a writing mood so I just wrote this random thing , its just simplex rhyming but enjoy

We're in the dark
But I'm fully aware
that something horad
lurks out there
This beast of no tomorrow
lives within today
bringing suffering
to those who get in its way
horns as sharp as diamonds
with claws like a hawk
this monster will haunt you
with every step you walk
for fear of the dark
it will only come out in light
so wear all black
and hopefully it won't bite
it cannot be killed
by bullets or knifes
so put away your weapons
and run for your lives
try not to hide
in homes that can be set ablaze
I guarantee with its fire ,
you won't get out of the haze
If you wanna drive away
you won't get that far
the beast will chase you down
like a jaguar
so what I am trying to tell you
is that there is no hope
we'll all be dead
so no need to mope
but on the bright side
you could always make it to mars
just build a space ship
and try to avoid the stars !

Reviews

[Adora.xo]

Awesome job! Yeah a few spelling errors but brilliant imagery and makes you wanna run away from something you THINK is there :P Keep it up!

[The Wave]

alot of great imagery in this one!
you made a clear mental picture of everything u wanted us to imagine

"horns as sharp as diamonds
with claws like a hawk..."
very nice description!

overall, there are some spelling errors, i dont even think "horad" is a word, i think u meant horrid. and its really descriptive writing that makes a piece really good,
good job.

[jessfoundwonder]

i'm honestly feeling a little creeped out right now.
good job.
and thanks for the review earlier.