Another Type of Magic

This is just a work in progress but as I go along I realize how far I'm getting. I would love to know what you all think of it and I want you to be brutally honest. :) Leave me comments or even send me a message about what you think. I take all advice into consideration.
Just a note: this takes place before Arthur is king (kind of got the idea from the show Merlin but its not based on that this has nothing to do with Merlin becoming a great wizard though they do get presented as characters. The only thing that will be similar is the fact that in Camelot has banned magic thats it. Now on with the story! ha-ha