Ice

I have built a fortress

So I can’t hear you shout

I’m just being cautious

Forgive me, you’re locked out

 

I have my walls of ice

Sure I’ll put on a show

I’ll pretend to be nice

But I’d rather lay low.

 

You don’t really know me

Behind these frozen walls

I alone have the key

But my loneliness calls

 

If you dare, come on in

Show me you’re here to stay

Break through my frosty skin

Or you can walk away.

 

Be like everyone

I’m sick of you leaving

Because now I’m just done

And I’ll sit here grieving.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Beautiful simply beautiful.
This was very very deep, written from your heart, which makes for the best poems.
I love the rhyme scheme, and the way it all came together.
It was very meaningful, and moving, filled with emotion, the title fits this piece perfectly.

I love it its a perfect way to describe having put up walls, because you're scared of being hurt, but you also want someone to break them down, and you're daring someone to break them down and prove to you that they wont hurt you.
Brilliantly penned honestly, truly loved this piece :)

[Mike Wolfe]

Thank you! Your words are very encouraging!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

you're welcome anytime :)

[child of God]

This is beautiful very deep really good flow i can see that you have deep emotions in it came straight from your heart thank you for sharing

[Mike Wolfe]

Thank you, I appreciate it!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The usage of ice as the barrier...
the thoughts which reflect it...
as you read this piece...
and through it all ---
the last stanza --- just melts ---
away the pain...in the way it ends...

[Mike Wolfe]

Thank you!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...