Her voice

Her voice

Hey, this is Britney I'm not in right now leave a message

Why aren't you pickin up?
You got caller id
i know you know its me
so what's up?

Hey, this is Britney I'm not in right now leave a message

hey, its me again
i just called to say i miss you
why ain't you answerin? Is somebody with you?

Hey, this is Britney I'm not in right now leave a message

this is the third time i call
is everything ok?
I'm really worried about you babe

Hey, this is Britney I'm not in right now leave a message

ok, now you're really starting to freak me out
look, i love babe
just lemme know if you feel the same way

Hey, it's me Britney I'm not in right now leave a message

i can't believe you're gone
baby why'd you have to go
now i can only hear your voice when i call your phone

Hey, this is Britney I'm not in right now leave a message

Bye baby, i love you
this is the last time ill call your phone
i just hope this message gets to you before God takes you home

Author's Note

My vision was better then this, i just couldn't put it
into words

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Such a melancholy write, Mike. Leaving messages on someone's phone can be such a futile gesture. However, I remember calling my cousin's phone after he had a massive stroke....I just wanted to hear his voice and it comforted me. I would call and leave messages though I knew he would never hear them. This poem brought it back for me. I think this is well written. Lydi**

[MikeV]

Thank you Lydi! I'm so sorry about your cousin

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks, Mike.

[Chris]

Being true to our "vision" can take your heart to places you aren't always prepared to revisit. Seems we all have 'voices' inside that echo and echo...

Mike this one carries baggage - for me. Thanks man, take care.

[MikeV]

Thank you so much my friend! I'm so sorry if it brought back painful memories

[Chris]

Don't be Mike. Poetry is SUPPOSED to reach inside the listener... it TOUCHES. You did fine.

[Sami Khalil]

This is me leaving you a message. A wonderful write...:)

[MikeV]

Thank you! That was an awesome way to review this! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[SyberRose]

I enjoyed this and i'm sure a lot of people keep messages on their voice mail just so they can always hear their loved ones voice...but for me that would be too painful...enjoyed Mike:)

[MikeV]

Thank you so much Rose!

[TrimarcoRansome]

Your vision did good!!...I love the concept of the piece, usual and thought provoking and so sad... You are really growing into your writing, Mike. Love it.
Grammar; You left the 'e' off on the end of by in the last verse.

[MikeV]

Thank you so much! I missed seein your reviews!
Thank you, ima fix that right now :)

[TrimarcoRansome]

I'm back! just took a couple of days on the art work for my series covers, it's lookin' groovy and really spoooky!! ;-)

[MikeV]

I wanna see!

[Laminators Dubai]

hey. its me glitch...and i love your writing idea ! ^^
never leave and have fun!^^

[MikeV]

Hey Glitch! Thank you so much!

[Pax]

whoa, that's really sad...
the ending part was really amazing, it stings the heart...

[MikeV]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it :)