Goodnight Dad

Today is Saturday and Saturdays rule.
Why you ask? Because on saturdays there's no school.
So today is our day to hang out
Eat cereal and watch cartoons till twelve.
Oh Daddy, how you make my heart melt
I wanna tell you I love you, but I don't know how.
Later, when the time is just right
I know, I'll tell you tonight
Finally the time came and I gathered all the strength I had
But all that came out was,"goodnight dad."
I'll tell him tomorrow, for tomorrow's another day.
Unfortunately, I awoke to the news that through the night, my dad had passed away.
The day came when I saw him in the pine box
To this day, I have never cried so much
I wanted to tell him,"I love him," it was the last chance I had
But when I said goodbye to him,all I could say was,"goodnight dad."

Reviews

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Wow, this almost had me in tears! I can feel the pain between the lines...
The "Goodnight, Dad" had me thinking that death is not the end. In the poem 'Thanatopsis', death is likened to an afternoon nap, and the statement "Goodnight, Dad" simply shows the belief that the person has not died; rather, he/she is merely sleeping. And we look forward to the day when we will lie in sleep after them and wake up with them, too.

This is a moving write, Mike. :)

[MikeV]

Thank you very much! You got in on the dot with the meaning of
goodnight dad :)

[AleeshaM]

Lovdd it so good tue only thing that confused me was the begaining it takked about sunday being awesome then got.on the subject with how you loved your dad but none the less i loved it really sad shows how you should always say i love you to someone you love cause anytime they coukd go really great!!

[MikeV]

Thank you! I meant it was awesome to hang out with my dad on days theres no school
and how much he meant to me but I couldn't tell him I love him no matter how hard I tried

[CreativeCookie]

It's very sweet and heartfelt, with a wonderful flow. Keep it up!
Love,
CreativeCookie

[MikeV]

Thank you!

[Aziz Luther]

Sad yet a lovely poem. teaches me to say "I love you" to my loved ones before it's too late for I do not know what tomorrow may bring

[MikeV]

Thank you!

[Nicole]

The concept of this piece if wonderful. I felt the sadness and longing throughout, it was a very interesting read. :)

[MikeV]

Thank you! :)

[zaneybear]

I love this piece, and if this loss was really struck upon you I am sorry for the loss, but this is a great piece, because sometimes those words wont come out, whether we cant let ourselves spea them or we don't really mean it because I love you is a heavy statement, and having the timing of his passing, it could happen at anytime, so if you love someone tell them the minute you have a chance, this reminds me of my gg's passing I never told her I loved her and it still tears away at me. keep writing well done

[MikeV]

Thank you so much! my dad is actually fine :)
I just thought this idea up in my head. Everything you
Said was exactly the emotions I thought when writing
It. Great review! Thank you again