Winter

My personal Winter experience

Winter

Grey sky, dark Night /

Winter is coming and it´s taking all the Light

And in the coldest of all the Season´/

My heart keeps me warm and I know the Reason

Someone special showed up and changed my Mind/

Showed me the way to stay happy, that was so hard to Find

Now all I hear a bells Ringing/

Someone´s outside Singing

Everything smells like Biscuit/

Only one month till Christmas

Author's Note

I´d appreciate any kind of feedback

Reviews

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Now all I hear a bells Ringing/
Someone´s outside Singing
Everything smells like Biscuit/
Only one month till Christmas

There was so much feeling of joy in this small but wonderful poem.
It made me think and remember the times I was littler and thought about the winters I had.
Very beautiful and very well written!
Keep up the great work!

Your Friend,

C. Lee Battaglia

[Light]

Thanks alot!!!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

wonderful write, here in australia we have xmas in summer, so different to yours but i would love to experience a white xmas one day. lovely piece of work again, thanks for entering this into my comp,x

[Light]

Once a gain thank you !

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

This piece flows rapidly and never stops to breathe, maybe slow it down a touch, other than that it works well and guides perfectly, well done.

[Light]

Well thanks a lot! Would you mind explaining what you mean with flowing to rapidly and never stop breathing? Otherwise thanks for the feedback!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

WHat I mean is the pace in which it reads, like you are hurrying to get the point out, where a few more carefully placed words may let the reader savour the meaning more.

[Light]

Ah I see for example at the end right? Okay got it! I try my best to keep that in mind for my next one. Thank you !!