One Night

Only the first part is real.

My heart, I, the moon and a candle enjoyed, as it then seemed, the sleeplessness of our friendless night. I felt my heart, and saw the little candle, burn and tremble to the hurried rhythms of the teasing wind. The moon in her sky and I in my dimly-lighted corner stared at each other, mocked each other’s single-minded aloofness, and then smiled at each other with pride.

 

Suddenly, the wind began to blow wilder; the candle went frenzied, and then died down.  A while after, a majestic cast of crawling grey clouds thronged around the moon and veiled her, jealously, like an obsessive lover. They kept her hidden, imperiously stifling the eminence of her graceful silver lights.

 

Down below, left with not a speck of light, my heart and I waited desperately for the brooding clouds to pass, or for our silvery comrade to clear herself a way through them. We waited, vainly, while the night consumed itself. And we kept waiting, helplessly, till the first glimmers of the dawn raped all of our hopes and dreams, one after the other.

 

My heart and I, callously disenchanted, and horrified with the indiscrete horridness of the scene, went to bed and quietly wept. By then, there was no more darkness and no reason whatsoever to wish for the light.

 

Before the ghost of sleep debarked, I wondered: “What is light without darkness?”

01:53

06th September 2014

Reviews

[LauraraMonique]

This was perfection, in my eyes. I loved it all and it kept me hooked and the best part, I could hear your voice. I love it! Keep writing and never give up! You are the kind of person that can change the world with your words!

This is the part that hooked me:

"I felt my heart, and saw the little candle, burn and tremble to the hurried rhythms of the teasing wind. The moon in her sky and I in my dimly-lighted corner stared at each other, mocked each other’s single-minded aloofness, and then smiled at each other with pride."

I saw it in mind perfectly!

Best,

Laurara Monique
http://laura.productions/

[Eve S.]

Whatever I write would never really mean a thing until it's read as sensitively as you did read this tiny piece, so thank you. Your review means a lot to me. You wrote in your introduction of your My Mother Married a Monster: "My goal will be reached if I can just touch one person’s life". Well, I did not read the story yet, but this saying of yours, which I think says it all, touched my heart, and with it I totally agree. I’ll make sure to have some time to explore your website and read some of the thoughts and feelings you’d posted.

Peace

[Laura E. Aranda]

Awesome! Really heartwrenching stuff

[Chris]

This is my second pause here today... I wanted to think a little before commenting.

Sometimes our thoughts ARE that clear and upfront... and no less valid. A good question to end with.

[Eve S.]

When I first started writing the moonlit beginning of this tiny piece, the end seemed to me so unlikely to be a question, and yet a question it is. This makes me wonder now whether I'll ever be mistress of my own words, and whether they were and are really mine.

Well, never mind ! And thank you again for passing by.

[Chris]

Thanks for giving me pieces of you to pause with...

[Eve S.]

Most welcome :)

[Woody]

a very interesting concept, choice of words and description. very original. I enjoyed the read. thanks for sharing Speck of Dust.

[Eve S.]

You are most welcome, Woody. I'm glad you liked it, and thank you for being the first to say something about it. :)

[Woody]

I'm glad I did. I was really surprised no one had reviewed it. such a damn shame that good writes sometimes go unnoticed.