She Burns

She Burns

A Poem by Eve S.

She cools the nerves that I burned

She makes it right when you feel blue

She makes of you a man, I learned,

And how to quite her, you’ve no clue! 

 

You light her, you put her on fire

And quietly she burns for you

It’s such a scene to admire

When, bit by bit, she falls for you

 

The way you squeeze her and smile

Seems like you’re making a breakthrough

You breathe her, consume her in a while

Then down you’ll throw her, won’t you?

 

Breathe in and out, once, twice, thrice

And when it’s all done, just start anew

Of that guilt-free pleasure you’ll know the price

Only when of your days are left few

 

Trust not a cigarette, O my friend!

She’s harms more than charms, if you knew!

She lives and dies under your command

Glorious! Yeah, that might be true!

But when to your life she puts an end,

The only one to blame would be you. 


© 2015 Eve S.


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yes she is a vixen this one... glad I stopped and told her good bye, that was in '88, but funny every now and then she will call, after all these years she thinks I'm a fool.. oh well... Enjoyed how you wrote this, the images invoked and how she is hard not to inhale... ~~redzone

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Eve S.

9 Years Ago

Now I’m feeling a bit guilty for not having replied to your amiable review earlier. Tis weird thou.. read more



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The sagacity with which you wrote this, the gender and personification of the cigarette, along with the comparison to a sick seductive mistress. You captivate the audience, you make them actually feel the similarities and the difference, your poem stands as a warning, but also at the significance of the moment when a person makes such a horrific mistake. You are right, cheaters/cigarettes do burn, and not with illusory pleasure but with a sulphuric downfall instead. Brilliantly written, keep writing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eve S.

9 Years Ago

It makes me smile to read all what you could see through my poem. Aren’t sharing with the others a.. read more
yes she is a vixen this one... glad I stopped and told her good bye, that was in '88, but funny every now and then she will call, after all these years she thinks I'm a fool.. oh well... Enjoyed how you wrote this, the images invoked and how she is hard not to inhale... ~~redzone

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Eve S.

9 Years Ago

Now I’m feeling a bit guilty for not having replied to your amiable review earlier. Tis weird thou.. read more
Fantastic write!
We should use beautiful art to convey message of truth and healthy temperance. This feel like a gentle version of exploring the seven deadly sins...
This poem could be true of many of our vices in life.
Well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eve S.

10 Years Ago

I appreciate your vision of things. And yes, I do agree that art should be used for such a noble que.. read more
Nicely done and very unique spin...I enjoyed this piece, thank you. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eve S.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Patricia ! I'm glad you liked it.
Patricia

10 Years Ago

Your'e welcome :)

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