Have You Won?

Man will seldom tell the truth.
A lie is far less complicated,
a lie is far less dangerous,
a lie is far less effort.

The sentiments are always the same.
I didn't want to make you cry,
I didn't want to hurt you,
I didn't want to ruin what we have...
But after your poison is administered, what do you gain?

Dishonesty clutches the deepest part of your soul.
It feeds on you,
it breaks you down,
it destroys the best of what your heart holds.

A flavor of darkness consumes a liar.
The light fades, the curtain falls,
and you are left alone.
Have you won yet?

After the truth finally rears out of the shadows,
and your black heart is on display,
Have you won yet?

Your lie shattered us more hopelessly than the truth ever could.
Have you won yet?

Reviews

[Jodelle]

I honestly believe the poem starts at Dishonesty... purely because it grabs the reader at that point. I love the metaphor that runs through and the repetition towards the end, I honestly believe the ending is strongly built and maybe you should continue from there..other than that, great emotive poem.

[Jennifer]

Excellent points. Thank you for your review and honesty!

[B-poet]

Being a constant lier is a no win situation because there's no room for a layer of truth underneath the rumble of constant deceitfulness. Great write. :) A thought provoking read.

[Jennifer]

You're entirely correct on that one. Thank you very much!

[Kamran Javed]

well written.

[Jennifer]

Thank you very much!

[Faith]

That's really good

[Jennifer]

Thank you!! :}

[Faith]

:)

[NITHIN PURPLE]

some breeding philosophly and aesthetic values here...........

[Simon Welsh]

That cuts deep. I love it.

[Jennifer]

Thank yoooou! I feel that being lied to is something everyone can relate with, sadly.

[Simon Welsh]

Yep :/

[Deidara]

Wow, this is amazing. You really show the full power and effects of a lie. Makes me think twice now about telling one. Ah, this is a wonder work of art.

[Jennifer]

Thanks very much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. (:

[Deidara]

I hope to see more from you in the future, always nice to spot a great poem and wait for more.

[Jennifer]

Aww, goodness, you're sweet! People like you inspire me to write more.

[Deidara]

Ah, the same. I normally can't write unless I'm inspired from others. A lot of my poems I wrote for and about other people I've encountered through social media. I've never met them, but I got to know them over a long time and they requested I write them a poem. I love to write to make others happy.