Dream Sweet

Dream Sweet

A Poem by Resa

Good night, sweet angel.
In my dreams, we shall meet.
Kissing me gently, in your sweet dreams.
Tonight, we both will dream so sweet.

© 2018 Resa


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I think that this poem's strength is that it is succinct and it states an idea directly. I also believe it succeeds in creating a love atmosphere. Where it falters though is in its repetition of sweet four times, having cliche themes and its wording making it a tad confusing. I think that the repetition of sweet makes this poem seem sort of tedious and immature. The wording in the last two lines, I believe conflict with the first two because usually when someone dreams they are not having the same dream as someone else. In addition I don't think that you should have defined the main characters dream and the other character's as different and then attempt to combined them in the third line. And yes love has been done before but in a manner like this seems to be very common with newer or adolescent writers. If you were going to attempt a similar idea everyone has done maybe go about it in a new and refreshing way.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Resa

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your long , detailed criticism.
I wrote this short poem not to be “ cliche �.. read more
Gee

6 Years Ago

Ouch !!!!!!!!!!!!!
Resa

6 Years Ago

What kind of a Person enjoys spending that much time criticizing !
I’m extremely open to co.. read more
it definitely is sweet telling to see each other in dreams

Posted 6 Years Ago



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Added on March 26, 2018
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Resa
Resa

Brentwood , CA



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