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Purple

Purple

A Poem by Bianca

 I hang my head down low

Trying to not let the tears flow.

   He utters an excuse for what he did,

and I know theres a bruise forming.

  Pleads me to forgive him

Weird how i say okay.

  The bruise is a dark purple-black, a symbol for my sorrowful life that I live.

Only difference that in a week the bruise will improve while my life won't.

    I'm on a rafting drifting farther and farther from reality.

Nothing can truly call me back, because I'm all alone.

   Nothing I have to rembember, just a bruise that I'll soon loose.

If only my life can improve, I let the tears flow.

© 2013 Bianca


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I would save a soul for the color purple, abusive relationships are all around us, this poem brought to life the martyrdom that so many of us face, in one way or another.

Posted 11 Years Ago


A nice poem. Thank you for penning...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Not bad, but check your spelling, and I think you could have chosen more evocative and vivid imagery. Some of it currently feels a little dull and boring, and that's definitely what you want to show the reader. I also think you might want to cut that line about the symbol, as it seems a little heavy-handed - the reader can figure it out on their own.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Bianca
Bianca

Homestead, FL



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