My love was swept away...

Hold on to your love. And never let go. Because you never know when he/she might just let go.

 

My love has gone.

Swept away.

By the ocean waves.

The moon seeks light on top of me and I find comfort in knowing I'm not all alone.

 

My love has been gone.

For quite some time now.

Wondering when he will be back.

Everyday I check the sea.

To see if he's there smiling at me.

 

My love has been gone for years on now.

I'm so close to giving up on hope.

What's the point, when he's not close?

Far away.

Swept away by the ocean waves.

But, my hope still lingers...

Intil he comes back.

 

He is my love, my life, I need him by my side.

 

Please, my love, come back to me.

I'm tired of hoping...

I'm tired of dreaming...

I'm tired of wishing...

That you will be back soon.

 

 

 

 

My love is still gone.

Author's Note

He was swept away in the blink of an eye. And never seen again.

Reviews

[Wildecat]

I liked your poem, unfortunately we can't please everyone. Nice write.

[Ben Walton]

before i start, not to be an a*****e, but there's a typo in the last line of the third stanza. "intil".

I enjoyed this. it was cute and tragic simultaneously. I also liked the rhyming without a definite rhyme scheme (i hate rhyme scheme unless it's done really well). i also like how it seems to go chronologically. To "oh he'll come back" to "he's never coming back." it was a good color and mood shift.

but, it was rough (to steal the words of the other person who reviewed it). it seemed kind of immaturely put together, with very indefinite structure. also the periods at the end of every line make for some very awkward stops when reading.

but overall /thumbs up!

[Hannah!]

Very nice. It gives me the image of someone sitting on the beach, staring at the sea and just reflecting. It is a bit rough, though, and could probably use some going over; all the same, it's very pretty. Portrays the idea of loss quite well.