The Unforeseen...

Falling in the snow, soft as the raindrops, For I like the unforeseen, In the land of our childlike dreams.   Where I wait to finally be seen.

Author's Note

So, what do you think? =]
It's definitally the shortest thing I've ever written.

Reviews

[Lady Lazarus.]

this is utterly beautiful.
I feel this way too.
its the kind of poem you could show to anyone in the world & they'd feel a longing in their hearts.
you bring poetry to life.

[Graybeard]

Kayleigh,
I like it. For as brief as it is it presents a lot of possibilities to the reader. The first two lines are great. I like the pairing of snow and rain. Usually the two are not seen together so the dichotomy (is that the right word?) is fairly dramatic and unexpected. The word "like" in line three kind of troubles me though because it is very ambiguous. Are you using it in the sense that you enjoy the unforeseen or are you likening yourself to the unforeseen? If the former is the case I think it's fairly weak. In a poem this short (5 lines, 27 words) every word is extremely important and must be powerful and precise. If, however, the latter is the case it could be pretty strong. You might have to tweak the following 2 lines a little bit or maybe throw in some commas, to clue the reader in to that interpretation. One possibility:

For I, like the unforeseen,
In the land of our childlike dreams
wait, to finally be seen.

Don't know...

I like the final two lines, though. The waiting implied in the last line is kind of a cliffhanger for the reader. I'm left wondering what you are waiting for and that opens up a lot of possibilities for consideration leaving me with something to contemplate.

Well done!