Winter Days

A poem of winter days.

In the winter we froze
And only ever were we rose
To build a clever snowman
With a carrot nose.

Cold winter Sundays
On the hallway stairs
Tall stories were told
Some fair and some so bold.

A tale of a rat
A deterrent to our nature
To continue along the rail,
So never would we venture.

A narrow hallway
Coat adjacent
Games played all day
By all players decent.

At a quarter to  nine
A meal arrived, the masses appeased
And in luxury would we dine
On our knees, always so pleased.

Sausages and chips
Chicken nuggets and burgers
Distributed and placed on our hips
Hands and fists full of chips.

Then bowing heads
And the dispersion to far off beds,
Legs of lead and feet of tar
Were carried off to the car.
 

Author's Note

*Decent pronounced day-cent

Reviews

[Michael X]

you really scoped the degree of insight from beginning to end, the reader identifies the sharp quality sounds, sight, taste and experience,
the senses are alive and you've captured the ending to perfection.
inmo, this poem feels professionally written

[Jessica]

I can almost smell the cold winter air in this. Great write :)

[RTB]

it was good i liked it

[Augustus]

The warm side of winter is what you have portrayed I feel, and you have done it very well...I loved the last two lines immensely because they are suggestive and subtle...the flow is also easy everywhere...Overall, a very nice write...

[An owl on the moon]

This is a wondrously unfolding winter's tale, from joyful fun and food, to those moments when the day turns to dreams. Beautiful.

[Romeion Case]

Really great. I like the what was said, but i also like what was not said. Characteristic of good poetry - allows the reader space to use their imagination for interpretation. good job. keep 'em coming. :-)

[EMW]

Very well written. I liked this. You are a very good poet.

[aaron]

i love it yaay

[Dom Macchiaroli]

I now have you to thank for putting a craving for hamburgers in my head....
This is a nice memory in script. I liked it a lot.

[zombiikillah666]

Flows really good.
I really like this
write. (:
I think this poem
would bring back
others own memories
that they love. Great job! (: