Minette

Minette

A Poem by Middling

Minou
How do you do
What are thinking
What is on your mind.

Lying in sloth
Eternally sleepy
On a piece of woollen cloth.

You lie and sit
Sit and lie,
Only ever moving
For a spontaneous fit.

A fluency of
Yellow smoke
Nothing ever spoke
A creature so mellow.

So often silent
And not heard
Except for a want.

© 2010 Middling


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I believe you'er taking about an animal...a Sloth...by the sounds of it in the lines...this was hard to read and may I offer some advice to the verse:

Minou
How do you do
What are thinking
What is on your mind.

Lying in sloth
Eternally sleepy
On a piece of woollen cloth.

You lie and sit
Sit and lie,
Only ever moving
For a spontaneous fit.

A fluency of
Yellow smoke
Nothing ever spoke
A creature so mellow.

So often silent
And not heard
Except for a want.
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Minou

How are you?
What are you thinking?
What is on your mind?

Lying in sloth is
eternally sleepy
on a piece of woolen cloth.

You lie and sit.
Sit and lie,
only ever moving
for a spontaneous fit.

A fluency of
yellow smoke
nothing ever spoke
a creature so mellow.

So often silent
and is not heard
except for a want.

I did my best to give this a quick fix and make your words sound more just and clear...Hope this helps you...

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Middling
Middling

Ireland



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