Dance of the Damned

There's a perpetual chill in the air

Where the voices whisper ever soft

Like a wind whisked through your hair

Like the tired lessons mothers taught

How proper girls were docile and fair

Rather everything I was not

I can hear them call to me

Singing songs of strange places

Brushing me with hands like a breeze

Begging me to see their faces

It's a ghastly ball of black and white

Fine corpses dance with painted masks

Only in the darkest, coldest nights

Coaxing me to fall into his lifeless grasp

The reaper coos softly in my ear

His voice composed of sweet, hypnotic rhythms

Urging me to stay with him here

In this world so beautifully dark and grim 

His cool hand linger at my waist

Keeping me in this cryptic palace

Perhaps it would be easier to give in and stay

In this damned dance forever lost

Author's Note

God has the glory <3

Reviews

[Emma Marie Taylor]

I could completely imagine this entire thing! I loved the lines

"Like the tired lessons mothers taught
How proper girls were docile and fair
Rather everything I am not"

That part I found wonderful! Along with the imaginative way the poem creeped forward, I didn't want it to end! Fabulous work!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you so much :)
God bless, and tell me if there's anything I can review in return!

[Green]

I hate to repeat what everyone else has already said, but it was a detail I particularly liked about this poem so I'll say it anyways: I loved the imagery in this poem. When combined with the rhythm, it made me really feel the poem instead of just read it. Well done.

[Lost in Wonderland]

thank you very much:)

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

perfectly written. I am a dancer myself and this kinda described me and I just think it is perfect and also keep up the perfect writing. :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you(:

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

No problem :)

[lovejulez03]

Beautifully written..pulling and pushing to the end. It definitely leaves images in the mind and the way you wrote it made it easy to see. Thank you for sharing a great piece! :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

thank you so much:)
God bless

[j michael kaisner]

So many readers and their comments were exactly what I was thinking while reading. You're imagery is remarkable.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:)

[JayJayBlue]

A great, vivid poem, it lends a grim romance to the TotenTanz (I think that's the spelling haha)

Keep it up :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you so much:)
God bless

[Ezekiel Silver]

A remarkable poem. I like how vivid you make the imagery in this piece. Not bad.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:) God bless

[Irene]

I love the last line.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:)

[C.A. Lucas]

So dark... what's up, girl? You seem to like the depressing stuff. But then again, those are the easiest things to write. You write them well!

[Dean Kuch®]

Very eerie, ethereal little piece you have penned here. I personally prefere to embrace the darker, more sinister things lurking in the nether recesses of my mind. That's what we do, write about them and bring them out into the light for all to see. They're not quite as scary and intimidating that way.
Spooky stuff, great job!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you Dean:)
God bless