In the Company of Rain

Can you taste it in the air?

The storm on yonder horizon

Painting the world a grey and dismal vision.

Birds cease their flight to stare.

Shall I dance, would I dare?

My lover a rich man's son...

If I bid him, would he come?

'Tis doubtful with his many affairs.

Which leaves me to wander alone,

Enveloped by this sympathetic rain

Grieving with me as I ponder his lies.

It's watery embrace makes me feel welcome, known,

For I know no other but the birds hear my desperate cries

While I whither away in this silent pain.

Author's Note

My friend Abi who's a few years older than me was telling me about this poem type she was learning about in English 4. Today I got a text with the above rhyme scheme from her. So this is my attempt at a Petrarchan (which is an Italian sonnet). Hope you enjoy c:
God has the glory and may He bless you <3
~Lost in Wonderland

Reviews

[Tomi]

Beautiful, so very beautiful!!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you Tomi:)
God bless

[kublakhan27]

I always found rain to be therapeutic...unfortunately it doesn't make your problems disappear, which is what this piece sounds like...I did a Shakespearean one once but have never tried the Petrarch form...I've read some of them though and this is a great example of one...great job :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

I agree about the rain, and thanks:) I tried a Shakespearean one a while ago (though I skimped a bit on iambic pentameter. Too much for an average 14 year old haha)

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome :) I actually didn't try it till a couple of years ago, I didn't dare try it before that haha

[Lost in Wonderland]

I only did for a project in freshman English, I haven't tried another since:P

[kublakhan27]

Haha I've only done one myself...they're tough :P

[Lost in Wonderland]

agreed haha:P

[Tarry Franck]

I loved the imagery and the feel of this poem. I'm not familiar with this poem type either, however, you did a wonderful job anyway.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thanks:)
God bless

[Tarry Franck]

My pleasure

[Tai Ryens]

I'm afraid I'm unknown to Petrarchan sonnets. I can't be of help.
Nice poem nonetheless. I liked the general go-happy downer attitude of this, if that makes any sense.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Than you
God bless

[Kyle Sky]

Truly beautiful. Its imagery was overwhelming and the words describe it as lovely as it can be. Great piece.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you Kyle
Gd bless

[Ahmad Cox]

So beautifully done. Its sad yet uplifting at the same time.

[Lost in Wonderland]

thanks

[Trigorin]

Not bad. Not technically a Petrarchan sonnet because you've only kept up the ABBA form in the first half of the octave, but the sestet is solid and your concept and imagery are fairly well-done as well. Well done.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you for the review

[The Invisible Girl]

This is really good!
I'm jealous at your amazing writing skills!!!
This is my favorite poem from you, yet! ;) keep it up! 100/100

--Invisible Girl!! :D

[Lost in Wonderland]

Aww thanks!! :D Don't be jealous you talented girl, you're awesome^-^

[The Invisible Girl]

Nah! :P I'm average. Your work is much better!

[Lost in Wonderland]

psh you're too sweet haha:P

[Imara]

Well, I'm not one for sonnets but I loved this all the same. I've never heard of or read a petarchan so my review might not be helpful...anyways. I liked it a lot. At first I thought it was describing someones love for the rain but then you caught me off guard wit the rich husband. Which at first seemed out of place but then as I continued it fit it well. I kind of think of the Wicked Witch of the West melting away in the rain from lack of love. haha good job :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

aw haha thanks!

[Imara]

Welcome ^^