In the Company of Rain

Can you taste it in the air?

The storm on yonder horizon

Painting the world a grey and dismal vision.

Birds cease their flight to stare.

Shall I dance, would I dare?

My lover a rich man's son...

If I bid him, would he come?

'Tis doubtful with his many affairs.

Which leaves me to wander alone,

Enveloped by this sympathetic rain

Grieving with me as I ponder his lies.

It's watery embrace makes me feel welcome, known,

For I know no other but the birds hear my desperate cries

While I whither away in this silent pain.

Author's Note

My friend Abi who's a few years older than me was telling me about this poem type she was learning about in English 4. Today I got a text with the above rhyme scheme from her. So this is my attempt at a Petrarchan (which is an Italian sonnet). Hope you enjoy c:
God has the glory and may He bless you <3
~Lost in Wonderland

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

I know this it, is Arabic isnt it

[Lost in Wonderland]

merely from my imagination

[ANTO]

Hydrotherapy and writing is also therapy.
Well written and educational too -
thanks Mickey
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[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you for the review:)
God bless

[An owl on the moon]

Such a melancholy darkness moves over the heart here... the pain of loneliness... the hauntings of the rain... a heart longing for more... Beautifully rich and wondrous in the language of another time and place.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:) God bless

[Westminster Abbey]

I like it. The unusual rhyme scheme adds to the effect :)

[C.A. Lucas]

Really really good. I REALLY liked it :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

thank you :)))
God bless

[Nicaushio Yamaki]

nice work

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

That was.. wow! I love how beautiful you described the scene.
"It's watery embrace makes me feel welcome, known,

For I know no other but the birds hear my desperate cries

While I whither away in this silent pain."
The rain always seem sad.. yet strangly comforting. Great write :D

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you

[Luke L]

Lovely and a bit dark but a beautiful piece :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:)
God bless

[Luke L]

No problem... I would ask you to read my work, but I don't know you might find it very offensive :p

[Lost in Wonderland]

Haha yeah I'm a bit to young for it I think:P but I'm sure your a wonderful writer

[Luke L]

no worries thanks :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

No prob haha:) and thanks again for the review!

[Rhianne Ney]

I see, Italian, huh? I'm quite hooked by the language.
We'll be studying this the next school year, thanks for the wonderful example (:

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:) Though its not the best (my friend got irritated by my slat rhymes haha)

[Rhianne Ney]

I see but you can always work on that if you want to

[NITHIN PURPLE]

nice poem.....................