Reflection

I looked in the mirror

Just like any day

Expecting to see messy hair

Nothing unusual there

But as I gazed in the glass

The lighting low

I touched a face 

That I didn't know

Her eyes were large

And sunken and sad

Absent a shine

That she no longer had

Her face was gaunt

And pale like a ghost

A face without peace

A face without hope

The corners of her mouth

Tilted down with despair

As she hugged her own waist

Waiting for someone to care

I looked in the mirror today

But I don't know who stared back

Unless that really was me

And my stars faded to black

Author's Note

I just looked in the mirror and this is what I saw...I was a bit surprised...
God bless

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

There needs to be some revision in grammar, some breaks should be applied. Over all nice work, just minor fixes of all.

[Lost in Wonderland]

thank you, and I'll look at that. I know I'm not a super grammatically correct writer haha:)
God bless

[C.A. Lucas]

God bless indeed. I have those days when I just feel out of place, depressed, confused, but then I wake up the next day, look in the mirror, and see a delighted angel!

[Zoe Marie Ross]

This poem shows a lot of emotion and truth. I wake up some days and hate my reflection, and as you describe, sometimes it is hard to believe that it is you staring back. Well done.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you for the review
God bless

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

This poem is so sad.. so painful.. It had you hooked on the first word. Another amazing piece :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you :)
God bless

[Kyle Sky]

The feeling is just... painful, in my experience. This poem truly is very strong just by theme and idea itself. The atmosphere was depressing yet awesome in some way. The imagery too added a deeper expression. This is A poem of unique quality and has my sympathy. Wonderful piece.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:) God bless

[Akashi]

I looked in the mirror today
But I don't know who stared back.

Nicely done.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thanks
God bless

[Imara]

Oh I know this feeling all too well looking in the mirror and seeing something that isn't you. I love the rhyme!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thanks God bless

[Jay. E. V.]

I loved this, but as I believe in helpful criticism, I'm goign to rip it apart;D Be WARNED.

"Waiting for someone to care" I feel liek this line could be tweaked to give you INSANE power. But we'll leave that to you=D.

"And my stars faded to black" Has good power, but as it is your last line, I feel you could do better. In fact, with your skill, I KNOW you could do better.

There's my criticism. ;D

NOW, on to happier things. I won't try to understand where this piece came from, but It gave me some perspective. If I were talking to this girl I'd say "Hey, I care, honestly. So, stop your nonsense;D"

If you ever just want to talk, hit my inbox;D writer's block is slowing me down anyway. ;D

keep writing, and thanks for sharing=)

[Lost in Wonderland]

thanks for the review and help:) I'm free to talk whenever haha:)
God bless

[LadyInk]

This is a really touching poem, sometimes it's our darkest moments that inspire us, other times we just need to get it all out, either way I'm sending you a lot of friendly hugs because everyone deserves to feel beautiful. Awesome poem!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you so much:)
God bless

[Faith]

Interesting.