Goodnight

Eyes bright, staring up at the night sky

Reflecting the majestic star light

Grass tickles her bare legs and cheeks

As she lays there, serene and smiling, 

At peace in the evening breeze

She closes her eyes

And watches the world go by

People smoking on there way to work

Making them want to cringe 

And crawl six feet under the dirt

She sees the dismal, grey atmosphere

Hears children crying out in fear

The world so broken, she once called home

Now she lays, in her secret world all alone

Preparing to leave everything behind and go

Into wondrous dimensions unknown

Blood slipping down her wrist like a steady red stream,

She stands, finally done with her tiresome dance

Wishing now to fall asleep into a new found dream

Her dress pools at her feet, the weight of the world finally lifted

As she steps into the pond, giggling at the ripples

Water replaces her air, bubbles begin to fly

She closes her eyes on this last whimsical sight

Wishing the world, forever a goodnight

Reviews

[Arsh]

wow...ur this poem is also good.Hey r u a writter.?

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:) and not profesionally:P

[Arsh]

hey...would u like to join me..on here.....?

[scripted]

very emotional write, i like the way it was penned... it had great description to it. nice job, yours truely Danielle (scripted)

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you very much Danielle (thats my cousin's name by the way haha)
God bless
~Mickey

[scripted]

your more than welcome=)

[Ahmad Cox]

Wow, amazingly gripping and deep and ethereal. I

[Lost in Wonderland]

thank you! :)
God bless

[Bianca]

this is amazing. it is so emotional and gut wrenching, i adore it. it is all sad but at last the vocabulary used in this poem gives it a nice happy touch. i love it and i find it quite amazing, please keep up with your magnificent poems

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you so much:)
God bless

[Bianca]

you are welcome i just love your poems

[Lost in Wonderland]

aw thanks ^.^ God has the glory:)

[Akshat♥]

Perfectly written piece..
you have written about this girl's emotions so well..I guess that girl is you,lol
moreover I know it is very difficult to describe like this:)
In life everyone has to live it by their own..no one will help you in that..
Sometimes we want to lost in wonderland to believe that life is beautiful..
keep writing!! :D

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thanks :)
God bless

[Drowning with Stars]

I love the vibrance and contrast of the bright red blood in the midst of the dull brows and grays, and the worn out ripped feeling of the whole thing. Incredible imagery.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you!!

[Akshat♥]

You are always welcome dear..take care :)

[Moon]

Tragic and beautifully written . This piece is truely wonderful !

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:)
God bless

[Zachary_James]

You are a fantastic writer, i love this so much. The last stanza is so heartbreaking even to read. Loved this.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you so much :D
God bless

[Zachary_James]

can i ask you where the inspiration came for this?

[Lost in Wonderland]

Oh nothing really specific. I was just feeling the brokenness of the world so I thought I'd write about it vaguely

[devon]

Very sad, and tragic, though it's written very beautifully.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thanks girl:)
God bless

[devon]

You're always welcome!