Self Sabotage

An angel on my right                       A devil on my left

Filling my heart                               Tearing my hope to shreds

with lovely flutters                          Spinning sad deceits

Assuring me of your love                 That you're just toying with my emotions-            

Making me giddy                             Using me- just like him

Red cheeked and giggly                    Causing my crushed heart to beat

Healing my broken heart                   In a mournful song once more

With thousands of butterflies           Because maybe you don't really care

Being set free                                What's a game to you, is real to me

Author's Note

Tell me if you like the structure or if it was odd. God bledd, He has the glory

Reviews

[TheJordBaker]

I like the structure of the piece, very original and representative of how our minds weigh up situations. nice work :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:)
God Bless

[Kaylor Mason]

The structure is good. Reminds me of an old saying: "Paradise on my right, Perdition on my left, the Angel of Death two steps behind me."

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:)
God bless

[Kaylor Mason]

Welcome :)

[Pax]

the format is really nice...it shows the two sides of human...
great job!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you Willyam:)
God bless

[Baby Ricochet]

Love the structure. Great Job.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:)
God bless

[Heather]

very clever structure, I like how it went back and forth...few typo's..

Ad giggle? Ad should be all?
Broken hear.. should be heart
What is a game, flows better then What's.

I LOVE the title, the angels, and devils we listen to can destroy us or build us up.. I like.. LOTS

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you and I just fixed those typos:)
God Bless

[Heather]

on my screen... the word emotions is under the angel section, not sure how it flows on other's screens.. but you may want to space it over so its on the devils side where it belongs. ... I really do like this.. its unique

[Lost in Wonderland]

on my screen its normal..but i do know what your talking about (i sa it when I was editing)

[Heather]

:) its probably just my strange computer

[Lost in Wonderland]

oh alright:) haha my computer can be weird sometimes too

[Tasha]

No, the structure wasn't odd. I thought it was clever and brilliant! You are right God really does have the glory and he did bleed for us. Wonderful write.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you very much Tasha:)
God Bless
~Mickey

[Tasha]

You're welcome Mickey! :)