Lost, but not yet found

Gliding through a field of dying grass

A breeze of virulent air threatens to suffocate me

It seems Like I've been lost for years, tip-toeing on broken glass

And he watches, just waiting for me to fall

 

A breeze of virulent air threatens to suffocate me

Attempting to turn my soul pitch black

Its a raging war inside to win the light back

 

It seems Like I've been lost for years, tip-toeing on broken glass

Trying not come to my inevitable death

Stuggling to take atleast one steady breath

 

And he watches, just waiting for me to fall

He sees that I'm naught but a lost lamb, full of fright

But I promise, I'm not going down withought a fight

Author's Note

My first ever Trimeric poem, I wrote it quickly so I'm not sure if I like it....
Feel free to give your honest opinion. If it's bad I want to fix it!!

Reviews

[Poison Ivy]

A breeze of virulent air threatens to suffocate me
It seems Like I've been lost for years, tip-toeing on broken glass

this really got my attention, what a vibrant poem! intriguing!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you very much:) God bless

[Pax]

its not bad...its awesome..
i like this stanza:
It seems Like I've been lost for years, tip-toeing on broken glass
Trying not come to my inevitable death
Stuggling to take atleast one steady breath
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wonderful work

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you so much:)
God Bless

[Serenity Faith]

Oh wow Mickey! This was beyond awesome! Especially since it's the first Trimeric you've ever written. They're fun though are they not ^_~ 100/100

[Lost in Wonderland]

thank you emily!! And yeah, but they're kind of hard haha!
God Bless

[Speak in Silence]

I absolutely love this! I love this last line "But I promise, I'm not going down withought a fight". This is amazing :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you very much:)
God Bless

[Speak in Silence]

You're always welcome :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

:)