Lost, but not yet found

Lost, but not yet found

A Poem by Lost in Wonderland

Gliding through a field of dying grass

A breeze of virulent air threatens to suffocate me

It seems Like I've been lost for years, tip-toeing on broken glass

And he watches, just waiting for me to fall

 

A breeze of virulent air threatens to suffocate me

Attempting to turn my soul pitch black

Its a raging war inside to win the light back

 

It seems Like I've been lost for years, tip-toeing on broken glass

Trying not come to my inevitable death

Stuggling to take atleast one steady breath

 

And he watches, just waiting for me to fall

He sees that I'm naught but a lost lamb, full of fright

But I promise, I'm not going down withought a fight

© 2012 Lost in Wonderland


Author's Note

Lost in Wonderland
My first ever Trimeric poem, I wrote it quickly so I'm not sure if I like it....
Feel free to give your honest opinion. If it's bad I want to fix it!!

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It's so true! I am experiencing the same things you are in this piece. I really, really like it. Not just the writing, but what's behind it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

11 Years Ago

Thank you!
God bless
No words in my vocabulary can express how I felt reading this...and on a side note I also read all of the comments...I must say I'm so glad to have found God fearing people here...it truly fills my heart with joy that people still believe in Him

Posted 11 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

11 Years Ago

Thank you and I agree
This is a really good write, like the rhyme scheme.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

11 Years Ago

thanks:)
This was fantastic it's going into my favorites! This actually just might be the best thing I've read from you I love the conflict and the refusal to give into the darkness. Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

oh my gosh thank you so much! :) I think this just made my night haha:)
God Bless
~Mic.. read more
Excellent example of the never ending dance between one’s own yin and yang in this case God and the Devil. I have attempted trimeric form many times before it’s not always the easiest style to pull off. Well done the emotion stays on point, the message is clear, and a strong picture is painted. I appreciate the addressing of both sides of a coin that is man… in this case women. Not a lot of people are willing to do both either always simply looking at only the good or only looking at the bad. Keep it up yo!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

Thank you for the review!
God Bless
You are an amazing writer.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

Thank you!
God has the glory :)
 Soul Fire

12 Years Ago

you're welcome
Is it about God?

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

Yes He is :) He has stuck with me through so much junk in my life...it's amazing
Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

yeah..GOD will always be with you
Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

Amen
Good for you! Never go down without a fight ;)

Brilliant poem! I feel like I'm teetering on the edge of some dark, cavernous space the whole time I'm reading it.
You have a way with words

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

Thank you so much:)
God bless
Trimeric poetry isn't something I'm familiar with but I enjoyed nonetheless. Haunting and moving are the best two words I can use.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

Thank you very much:)
God bless
wow.. I wish i knew what trimeric meant.
The poem is sweet and sexy ( that's my most famous and highest compliment;))

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

He is
FrancescaX

12 Years Ago

I hope there are people who will come to understand that. Viva
Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

me too

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Added on August 7, 2012
Last Updated on August 7, 2012
Tags: Trimeric, Poetry, Lost, Afraid, Death, Figh, Internal struggles, Soul

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Lost in Wonderland

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