Air And Angels

Sit down, and smile, if for a while

And reminisce with me:

Of air and angels, stars and skies

Echoing through our dreams,

And drown our sorrows one last time

Without elixir's need...

The glory days of pride and honour;

The golden heart of endless valour;

The kiss beyond the lips...

And maybe then by some last chance

We'll slow our fall from grace.

So be here now, no reservations,

And know no world past revelations

Of what to feel and see,

And love me now, for once, for always;

The selfish strike again.

Reviews

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

I got the impression that this poem was about living in the past, about someone who was 'broken down on memory lane', trying to forget Today with all it's heartlessness by getting high on the past....'without elixir'...
but that last line threw me off completely :)
great job as always, you weave wonderful tapestries with your words.

[Morrigan Nicole]

Perfection!

[Jake Staffeld]

I loved how the last line affected the rest of the poem; I felt it was a plea for help, but when I read that line, it instantly changed the feeling to that of possesion. Well done!

[M.Babu]

You're ending was so unexpected from the upbeat tone the rest of the piece was taking-- brilliant.

This had that tinge of longingly awaiting life to become perfect- the wish that we could take a break from our humanity...only if we could!

Nicely done...

~M.Babu~

[Jazique]

Wow deep, interesting. Nicely done I think honor was spelled wrong though. Anyways nicely done on the Air And Angels.

[Ben Taylor]

This is well done.
I especially like rhyming, specifically in the first few lines:
"Sit down, and smile, if for a while
And reminisce with me:
Of air and angels, stars and skies
Echoing through our dreams,"
It just flows so well.

[rwar ish me]

I really like this.
I really loved the last two lines.
It very well written.
~Amai

[Dahlia Phoenix]

The memories that are marked inside our hearts will always be treasured and with that, we can make better choices in what we do.

"And drown our sorrows one last time
Without elixir's need...
The glory days of pride and honour;
The golden heart of endless valour;
The kiss beyond the lips..."

This part intrigued by the way you used your word usage and the expression that comes along with it. A magnificent piece even if short.

[Little Abbey]

Beautiful :)

[SINDE]

I really think this is a beautifully written piece of art.
And drown our sorrows one last
time
Without elixir's need...
The glory days of pride and
honour;
The golden heart of endless
valour;
The kiss beyond the lips...
And maybe then by some last
chance
We'll slow our fall from grace.