The Overlooked

So, behold the perfect.
The Virgin's greater substitute
Of Love, of Hope, of Faith,
With halo lighting unkissed lips
In evenlight of dusk...
And tarnishing the picture stands
The overlooked, the Faithless sod,
The undeserving frail,
The bashful heart that cannot say
"I love you" to her face;
What kindred hearts may never know,
But he could never change.
So, behold the Faithless hope in stagnant love
And pity everything...
And maybe duo in the sunset
Shall not seem as strange again...

Reviews

[MandaBear]

very nice

[Calypso]

I believe I understand this. I see this to be a virgin who no guy cares about cause she doesn't dress like a s**t. I could be wrong though.

[Kiri Nells]

Wow! I absolutely LOVE this piece. It flows and intrigues very well! I say success!
Thanks for sharing :D

[Jazique]

Wow...very...nice. The words had a certain flow to them and the whole thing was so intriguing and some words even went together well. Anyways well done for such short but, yet lovely poem of the heart and such a frail state of those in a faithless hope.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Beautiful work here. This is sweet and the words fit well with the scheme you're going with.

"The overlooked, the Faithless sod,
The undeserving frail,
The bashful heart that cannot say
"I love you" to her face;
What kindred hearts may never know,
But he could never change. "

This part captured my amusement. In a way, that happens around me all the time and it hurts to see it.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a Poet my friend. Your words sweet and beautiful. Like words from a time when love was everything.
"The Virgin's greater substitute
Of Love, of Hope, of Faith,
With halo lighting unkissed lips
In evenlight of dusk... "
Thank you for the amazing poetry.
Coyote