Immortal Epitaph

A Ruthless existence,
Within bounds and limits,
But still Ruthless, all the same...
Question the basis of love and delight,
And realise that mortality is frought with hazards
Of etching a name, past last
Heartbeat...
Take me, your epitaph,
Immortal, within a sense,
And inscribe your name,
On tongue, and heart, and maybe mind
That i may ever bear it...
Make me living reminder
Of what i lack;
Everything i sought after,
And, maybe, more...

Author's Note

Scoob, thanks for the title... Couldn't find a better one:)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. The questions that were raised by this powerful poem.
"Make me living reminder
Of what i lack; "
I like the open ending to the poem. In life we leave the act of goodness and evil to teach others to be kinder and wiser. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Jazique]

Captilize some I's but' other then that was a good poem. Short and all. IT really made you think and take it all in. Wonderful job. very creative with flowing words. Well done poet.

[iamkim]

Wew! That was quite a poem! Simply amazing and powerful! It defines the whole lot of living. Wonderful!

[Linear]

Impressed is what I am, such a write, so well written, so well versed, words written on the heart shall never fail, or so the poets say, me I'm cynical, but I did so enjoy your poem, say a thank you to Scoob for pointing me in your direction :O]

[Dylan A. Miller]

Wow, this is amazing. You have a unique style. Keep writing, I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

[Balls:)]

very, very nice :)

[Matthew vonHone]

Great work. I can't think of anything this poem is lacking. Though I think I like the opening best. Nice work.

[Patches I'm not so new..]

I looked, I read, nuff said

[Murtuza]

Thought-provoking, imaginative and interesting. Nice poem.

[Ben Taylor]

This is interesting; it starts pondering life, and what we leave behind (vaguely), and ends up as a love poem (ish). Very interesting combination. but i suppose the two ideas go hand in hand. Well done :)

[LoopyLoo]

Good :-)