Chess

This is what we have become:
Disapawntments with heads held high,
And you, my queen, torn from your king...
Sweet straight line drawn, and castle's honour
Forgotten... Not for a while,
But seemingly for good...
And i, once knighted in your nobility,
No longer stands on the board of your heart...
And fate's final Checkmate
States my defeat, and our end...

Author's Note

This was just a random day playing chess against my pal; he captured my queen, and i thought of what it must be like being the king in such a situation... I know, i know, kinda daft:)

Reviews

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Life is always a chess game no matter how you see it.
You have your pawns, knights, and then the queen who protects the king.
The king will always find a way to get what he wants even if it means everything around him crumbles into pieces. Love it!
Sometimes defeat can be a bite in the a*s kisser. lol
I like it though. :) Awesome job!

[NeiL ArandA]

You captured the most important and precious piece on the board. Though King is the highest rank by order its the most handicap and impotent. The Greeks used to say... if the King is the head , the Queen is the neck. She can turn the head whenever and wherever she wants to...

[Jazique]

That was creative and very good. Most people never think like this. To take in mind of occuring and how these can really play. You did a magnificent job for a draft as your words played in melody. Loved how discribed checkmate at a lost.
"And you, my queen, torn from your king...
Sweet straight line drawn, and castle's honour
Forgotten... Not for a while,
But seemingly for good...
And i, once knighted in your nobility,
No longer stands on the board of your heart...
And fate's final Checkmate
States my defeat, and our end..."

Well done and keep the awesome writing. Remember wht the monkey from the lion king 1/2
"Look beyond what you see"

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Chess is that game of tactics no one likes to lose.

[Coyote Poetry]

Life can feel like a chess game sometime. We forget sometime the people around us are alive and they have needs too. I have played many pieces on a chess board in my life. I have won a few and lost a few. A excelelnt poem.
Coyote

[Jake Staffeld]

I love this. It's great.

[*[[ Cadence ]]*]

i enjoyed this, good job!

[SINDE]

(:This is a great one bloke.Point of correction... captured queens:) Your imagery is great!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

beautifully put