Gone

And just like that
She was gone
She lay in a life between
As angels criticize

Nebulously recalling what was
And what could have been
Nefarious rumination
élan vital diminished

As she is to be no more

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love how your writing is so nuanced, this disappearance could be many things . . . maybe she left, which is the obvious interpretation, but also, maybe she has a habit of disappearing into her thoughts & at some point her companion learns to recognize the signs when she has check out of the present moment . . . or maybe this companion is the one who inadvertently shoves her spirit underground with his thoughtless scorn & narcissism. This disappearance is described in unique yet relatable ways, this phenomenon is hauntingly familiar (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Michelle Lauren]

Thx Margie .... for your insight. Oh how I wish it was as you stated. This was a dear friend; those life long friends met in high school. Sad to say she took her life, a life where she was scorned and criticized by people that barely knew her. She had a heart so forgiving of others; something I doubt I could match. That is why I the vision of her in a life in between, not knowing her next journey but as she lay there she finds herself still being criticized .... by angels no less. She was always there for me and I feel partly responsible for not always being there for her. Thx again for the insight .... be safe ... XO

[barleygirl]

Now I re-read, armed with your background knowledge, & your poem is deeply disturbing. Some people are just too tender for this harsh world! I'm sorry you went thru this, sorry she felt this bad, sorry for all the others impacted!

[Michelle Lauren]

.... fro my heart to yours ... thx XO

[Chris]

This has been enduring for awhile now...

[Michelle Lauren]

Unless it’s not what (or who) you think it is. XO

[Chris]

True, but what are the "odds"? Besides... I came by anyway.

[Michelle Lauren]

The odds are 100 percent in my favor .... this poem is the only poem I wrote about this particular person; a dear friend. It IS possible that one can suffer more than one loss Chris. ... just the same .... thx for coming by; much appreciated. XO

[Chris]

So very, very true. And I knew it was of loss without having a clue of who. An open reminder of my own times and of the many paqths that intertwined. I wasn't being mean, just real.

[Michelle Lauren]

Not a problem ... I believe in keeping it real. I also believe in realizations. XO 😉

[Chris]

Do you draw or find yourself in another's view?

[Michelle Lauren]

I do draw .... I sketch using mostly graphite and some charcoal ... I have two pictures posted in the pics tab

[Chris]

I too used to use Pencil lead, then moved to pastels...

[Michelle Lauren]

So Chris, do I get to see some of your artwork?