Sea sing with me

Sea Sing With Me

 

Friday, January 16, 2009 at 8:42pm |

 

So long since the waves touched my toes and tickled
My fancy with far fetched shells and carapaces
So long since the sea spray signed willingness
To enter my blood and run through my veins again

Pouring salt on my wounds
Reaching deep into the dark angry septic sores
Of betrayal, lies and subterfuge
The sea washes clean
Exposes my soul to the sun

From the windblown storm beaten heart bursts a new note
Saying sing with me!

Reviews

[Jonathan Ballam]

Lovely poem. Visually stimulating and vivid. I particularly like the second paragraph. I also think that you could work more on the ending and maybe flesh it out into two or three more lines?